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    dots Submission Name: Let the crowd hear you crydots
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    Author: solemnpen
    ASL Info:    18
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 303/339/42
    Words: 401
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 1295
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2479



    Description:
       this was inspired by my own life and by the movie hustle and flow....

    it seems like everytime you wanna lay down the mic, you find something to keep you going..

    my heart was in this and im thinking about going somewhere with it.. you seen it first on elite....


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    dotsLet the crowd hear you crydots
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    its hard for a poet
    people know the truth
    but they to damn scared to show it
    i've seen em come and go
    erased by the exposure
    of their basement flow
    hard to keep going
    hard to keep rolling
    with the pen on lifes waves
    got more on my mind
    everyday my life might cave
    but this is my time
    turn the fan off
    as i forcefeed you my rhyme

    Chorus

    I aint going nowhere
    I got to much to say
    I aint got time for your lies
    As i spit this shit, my way
    tell somebody else your alibies
    Let em spin the hook
    and let the crowd hear you cry
    and let the crowd hear you cry

    Looking through my eyes
    you see murder and prayer
    Look into my soul
    you see jesus and terror
    I spilt my heart into teddybear
    without looking for a care
    Then decided to back out da scene
    because people say im obscene
    then through inspiration
    i throw you some more dedication
    I see the burden of everybody
    in my rhymes as my obilgation
    so im gonna keep flowing
    without hesitation
    go to my grave knowing
    my rhymes got validation


    I aint going nowhere
    I got to much to say
    I aint got time for your lies
    As i spit this shit, my way
    tell somebody else your alibies
    Let em spin the hook
    and let the crowd hear you cry

    tears or fears
    what do you dread??
    was it the gunshots?
    or seeing your little cousin dead
    that made you throw on pac
    and listen to biggie small
    was it the hook or the flow
    that made you stand tall
    is it nelly or lil jon
    that had you thinking
    of saying fuck it all
    don't be alarmed
    there's still emcees keeping it real
    there's still soldiers
    not worrying about a record deal
    gonna keep the games respect
    come steal or kill
    so turn me up
    and tell me what you feel
    as i bring it to you
    without teen appeal

    I aint going nowhere
    I got to much to say
    I aint got time for your lies
    As i spit this shit, my way
    tell somebody else your alibies
    Let em spin the hook
    and let the crowd hear you cry
    and let the crowd hear you cry




    Submitted on 2005-08-13 23:48:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      OMG. That is awesome. I could see you standin on stage before like a million people spittin those lyrics, seriously. Your words really have a lot of power. "My rhymes got validation" I especially liked that line. It speaks to the real writers you know. Like people who aren't writing because they broke up with their boyfriend and they think it's the end of the world. The people who write to speak reality and the truth of their heart.~Sam~
    | Posted on 2005-11-04 00:00:00 | by alittlebithippy | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really great, I can hear it on the radio. I think you did a wonderful job in making us feel what you are saying. You are a very good writer and I will be reading more of your work.
    God Bless, Dawn
    | Posted on 2005-09-07 00:00:00 | by Dawnyd | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like the chorus. The verses remind me of nahlij's "Write". "and let the crowd hear you cry" is my favorite of all. I really can't say why, but it is. I'll be seein' ya around kid.
    | Posted on 2005-08-14 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, this really isn't my style of writing and it isn't the kind of thing I usually enjoy, but there was something about this I really liked. You're going to want to look over it for little errors like using *to* instead of *too*
    I really liked
    *was it the hook or the flow
    that made you stand tall*
    and
    *don't be alarmed
    there's still emcees keeping it real
    there's still soldiers
    not worrying about a record deal*

    Never Stop Writing
    ~Caribou~
    | Posted on 2005-08-14 00:00:00 | by painofthanatos | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm letting the crowd hear my cry - AWESOME!
    Your words, your rhyme, the timing, the images, sh*t - everything!
    "I aint going nowhere
    I got to much to say
    I aint got time for your lies
    As i spit this [censored], my way
    tell somebody else your alibies
    Let em spin the hook
    and let the crowd hear you cry
    and let the crowd hear you cry"
    I love that
    Better put me on the list for when this one comes out too...
    Lisa
    | Posted on 2005-08-14 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...i think you have a hell of alot to say!this is gonna be on my fav list like...real easy..your stuff is so great to read...its the kind that makes my heart beat fast and makes me wanna just...idk...its just a good feeling!

    -Suicidalchild51-
    | Posted on 2005-08-14 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]
      you know what, things always have a way of working themselves out. cade, you are such a skilled poet and emcee that i find it so difficult that you let that bull[censored] get to you. you gotta stand tall, let YOUR pen write your wavelegths, don't let these priks strap you to a chair and ask you yes or no questions.~P
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by Aknahlij_d 1 | [ Reply to This ]
      huh. good u still got something 2 say. betta not have lost ur edge. this is one of ur best cade. i agree with suicidal this is fave material. anyway hustle and flow was the [censored]. everybody gotta have a dream and sometimes u gotta fight 4 ur dream or that's all it's gonna be. a dream.
    "troy"
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      "i've seen em come and go
    erased by the exposure
    of their basement flow"

    Basement flow?!? What the hell is basement flow?! And the first line makes me laugh. "It's hard for a poet." Ahem... YOU ARE NOT A POET! You are a rapper. Quit calling yourself a poet. The 'chorus' said enough about that.
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by SorrowfulMind | [ Reply to This ]
      I aint going nowhere
    I got to much to say
    I aint got time for your lies
    As i spit this [censored], my way
    tell somebody else your alibies
    Let em spin the hook
    and let the crowd hear you cry


    tight i like thsi one its pretty tigh i like the way it flows and i really dont know wut else to say besides its tight


    heavy knowledge
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by heavy knowledge | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting flow! Very visual and deep. As everyone else, I like the chorus and the verses. I did have a little problem with the first line, but maybe it's one of those things that is better heard than read. But that one little line doesn't hurt the poem because I understood it! And I love the title...it fits! nice piece yo! keep it up! peace!
    | Posted on 2005-08-22 00:00:00 | by L.i. | [ Reply to This ]


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