This was an interesting write seems. It was short and to the pint. I like write like that, makes them just that more profound. This poem seems to speak about how one is isolated from the world and society and while the world moving on. Its like your trap and suffering. At least thats what I gathered.
I really enjoyed this write. Keep up the good work and have a blessed and most wonderful day and God bless. Thanks so much for sharing.
Ha ha, makes me think of something very innocent. Like you just now realized...hey...I'm cold.... Also somehow reminds me of some relatives overseas. They're pretty used to warm weather and so the minute the see the leaves in the trees rustle a bit, they bundle up. Enough of that. So when I read the first two lines I though...Very nice...slighty cheesey, but I appreciate cheesey things. Cheesy in a very, very good way you must understand. The third line was stated with such an...obviousness about it. Like as an after thought or something. Fun little thing. Peace, LucyDiamond
Sounds like you are the only unhappy person in the world, surrounded by those who are happy and don't even notice you there... Also reminds me somehow of the kid who doesn't get picked by either team, and has to sit on the lonely bench and watch others enjoy the game. Very thought provoking piece. cher
this is a short piece that kind of throws me off a bit. you talk about the sun being bright and warming the world yet you are cold and freezing. is it because it says shining with love and happiness and you have hate and pain in your life? thats what i imply. i really enjoy this piece though because the ending it something that catches people off guard. "And I was in the shadows, freezing." I my self like this last line because its how i feel. if you are saying you have unhappiness and are alone then i can relate very well. a lot of people feel they are out in the cold these days. so its as if there is shadows around almost every corner. which is kind of sad if you think about it. people shouldnt be unhappy but this world is imperfect so there will always be sin and saddness. just keep your head held high because everyone always has even a glimpse of happiness atleast once. anyways i liked this piece.
This is a short piece giving a very deep meaning and expressing the depressed state of mind.This poem can be a little bit more elaborative.I really liked the idea of expressing one's state of mind by making comparison to Sun and its warmth which the author feels others are getting and enjoying it when he himself is sad in life.Wonderful short piece.
Submission Name: The Sun
