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A Careless Silent Whisper


Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333 /325 /104
Words: 77
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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It's sad what more can i say


A Careless Silent Whisper



A careless silent whisper
always fills the air
takes me on a journey
that leads me to despair
you hold me in your arms
and try to make me see
a feeling that is gone
and a love that just can't be
it always makes me wonder
why i even try
everything you told me
now turns into a lie
a careless silent whisper
that i wish to hear
always makes me wonder
why i don't disapear




Submitted on 2005-08-14 21:46:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This poem was awesome. I really liked it alot. The wording flow...was perfect. it went well together. and I can relate. way ta go. keep up the good work.

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| Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by skullreaperX_X | [ Reply to This ]
  this hypnotist once said that the most commen type of conflict is personal. some thing called internal dialog, the cure is to change the tone of thoes voices. if they are high pitched make them low if their too if their too fast slow down and give them time to breath. i say that because the caracter in the poem is going through what im going through and it was these words that set me on the road to freedom.these words are whisperd like a best friends curse.
| Posted on 2005-08-14 00:00:00 | by Siriquelle | [ Reply to This ]
  I feel the sadness in your words, and in a way, the feeling of them as well. Thanks for the term "careless silent whisper". At least I know what to call them now.
| Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by whchong | [ Reply to This ]
  Very flowing, drew me in, the rhyme made the poem so much better, because you could see thet it wasent forced rhyming. Very personal. In short, I loved this poem, cant wait to see another from you.
| Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by peoplekityo | [ Reply to This ]
  this was really awesum! i agree! powerful words...kinda put a pic in my head and made melike...idk...die...poop...fukk idk...good job tho!

-Suicidalchild51-
| Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]


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