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Author:	elohimswork
ASL Info:	30/M/Chi
Elite Ratio:	4.54 - 76/96/39
Words:	217

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
Total Views:	239
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	1675

Description:
this is my city, my family, my blocks
there rocks...
My broken heart
when does it end so we can finally start....

put enough rocks in your pocket, 1st its going to slow you down, then its going to hold you down...

Who's got it... dots

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Money & the Power
who's got it
"Crack"

Now guess who wants the respect.

They work in 1st, 2nd, & 3rd shifts.
during the day they shop
weed lolly pops around
elementary spots,
At night they flock the city blocks.

future Leaders & Teachers
keepin the neighborhood
grave diggers busy.

they...
sift it
shift it
they're so shifty with it.

Heavy Chevy's blowing
through speed bumps,
no regard for babys running through.

18 yrs old
& still in the 9th grade,
school takes a back seat
to the street.

Baby's giving it up
for lust.

Inner City Blues
soothed with brews.

wipe my tears
bang my fist,
scream till my throat turns raw.
on my knee's
What do I
have to do
to help my people through.

Men
runnin through life
like boys.
evading life choices
listening to the
wrong inner voices.
surprise, surprise...
another generation of
fatherless homes.

Woman self pimping
& our sisters
living the sugah daddy hustle.

its like everything movin...
gotta hustle

3 baby's, 4 daddy's

Money & the Power
Who's got it
"Crack"...

Now who's
killin for that...

4 fingers and a pen poetry...

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  I live around a city where all you see is street income. And many will do that for the rest of their life or until they are jailed. Money equals greed....and a quck way to money....sell or deal drugs.

Mothers abandon kids.....kids turn into mothers.....it's all a backwards cycle. And all because the ghetto has a vortex that is too strong for many to escape. They get entwined in the street life and want to always follow and live the street life. And.....there is unfortunately....nothing you can do for these people that have become one with corrupt.

This was a great eye opener. Too bad many of the people you are pertaining to wouldn't take the time to read it and pay attention.

Much love,

Li Li
| Posted on 2006-03-29 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a very good write. I think you have done a tremendous job writing about such difficult subject matter, and so personal to you adds quite the touch here. This life you have described is very tragic. You have done a really good job with your wording and descriptions so the reader can really grasp the whole picture of this poem. Very well expressed. It must be so hard to live amongst this in your surroundings and see this everyday. This is a very good write. Take care.

Lorna
| Posted on 2005-11-18 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
  Reading your poem made me think of certain parts of new zealand and what is going on with P , particularly over the last years .. crystal meth.. not the same drug but taking on a similar social plague in our society.

very powerful and effective langauage. I felt the poem could do with some punctuation. it just helps the reader with finding the pace and focus of the poem.

thanks for a taste of your society that is normally hidden in the shadows of our social neglect.
| Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by x-ianhoyskolt | [ Reply to This ]
  WHOAH. talk about a slap in the face to reality and living. you totally gave it to us with the baggage and all. it's GREAT that you didn't cover anything up. you showed us pretty well how it's like to be a part of a street life or know someone of this style. its amazing how we are so much...in denial of people and their story. how we brush them off as "hobo's" or whores or just beggars. we dont know where they are coming from, or who they were or want to be. its amazing isnt it. wow.
this was just a slap, really hard and we are the pathetic one for not realizing.
i still cant believe how we think of ourselves.
| Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by JenFlynn | [ Reply to This ]

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