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    dots Submission Name: Doesn't Bleeddots
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    Author: Aknahlij_d 1
    ASL Info:    17/Male/Loueezy
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 369/516/136
    Words: 470
    Class/Type: Rant/Misc
    Total Views: 788
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2999



    Description:
       there are alot of lines where the ast words or some of the internal rhymes are slanged. just a kool little rant.


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    dotsDoesn't Bleeddots
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    i know i'm not the one to pick a fight and pull a gun
    i wish i had wings so i could fly into the sun
    i wish i could play God, but i know there's only one
    cat with more scratch than a DJ's index and thumb

    i flex my gums like my pecks are just for fun
    what you want with a modern day mini KRS-one
    put electricity in your systems, like coke and rum
    coke is dumb, so we blow dro like homeless bums

    we intelligent slum-raised, some dumb cumface pays
    to hear me kill my love like murders pinned on OJ
    but then again, who ever thought that idiot did it
    we pitied him, so we stretched the glove till me n mike fit it

    troy and cade did it
    'ronne and 'tex test my investments
    and pay my life support like its proper protection
    i rob self-esteem to improve my depression
    learn ya' lesson, i'm ya' teacher
    its my profession

    not a past time, i turn on dimes to make pennies
    we step on liberty so we rock bell bottoms like seventies
    look at this spreadsheet, commit it to memory
    remember i'm garbage at calulating morgages, type terribly

    weaponry in the back yard
    more than willing to attack y'all
    we put mosquitos in your moustache just so we can bitch smack y'all
    this ain't a frickin' opinion, call it bonafide fact
    all you saying is what i'm planning to write my second act on

    say what you will,man i'll say what i believe
    i believe i'll take your breath away so you will never breathe easily
    at least not without hitting your knees in prayers of peace
    cut my achilles so you can see that aknahlij_d doesn't bleed

    i'm estimating that you bitches' instigating is aggrivating
    so i'm commisioned my Jimmy to take your lives in vain
    God only know how i sneak inside your brain
    and twist your cortex, after i infest though your jaded eyes i project

    my project, my projects,
    my P.J.'s give me little lee-way when
    trash-talking my insomnia
    flash forwarding to recordings of boring tracks
    about making double-takes towards the clock like time is up

    i spit that gutter slang on top of boomerangs of such stupid staples
    as dip-n-dots, clowns pop-n-lock to classic roofus instrumentals
    i scratch the roof of my mouth on sharp stones and pop tart crusts
    i'm lying
    i'm the reason why the club Dj's ever started rewinding
    HOT

    say what you will,man i'll say what i believe
    i believe i'll take your breath away so you will never breathe easily
    at least not without hitting your knees in prayers of peace
    cut my achilles so you can see that aknahlij_d doesn't bleed




    Submitted on 2005-08-15 00:15:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      a good rant man.. one of the first rants ive seen that has some kinda organziation to it.. i also liked how you mentioned krs one... not many people even know who that is... good job..
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by solemnpen | [ Reply to This ]
      i wish i could play God, but i know there's only one
    cat with more scratch than a DJ's index and thumb
    coke is dumb, so we blow dro like homeless bums

    these lines were all my favorites. that was a good azz rant. keep kicking this shjt pj. cade's right though it was organized and these poets probly don't know who krs one is.
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      This was very melodic almost like a gangsta rap with the cool flow and vibe. Your message is clear and strongly delivered, i like that.

    say what you will,man i'll say what i believe
    i believe i'll take your breath away so you will never breathe easily
    at least not without hitting your knees in prayers of peace
    cut my achilles so you can see that aknahlij_d doesn't bleed

    I really liked this part, it shows your unwillingness to compromise your believes for anyone and that shows you as a headstrong person with a good knowledge of who you are as a person. Great write.
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]


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