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    dots Submission Name: The perfect Madnessdots
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    Author: brokensmile
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 241/326/148
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Society
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    dotsThe perfect Madnessdots
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    Marvel
    at such
    perfect madness
    closer
    scrutiny
    would prove
    otherwize
    but only fools
    who live prosaic lives
    ever set out
    to prove another's wrongs

    I wonder what secrets
    lie
    stuck
    beneath starving ribs
    reserving
    death for a later date

    saliva
    dried and cracked
    in freshly forced vomit
    never knew
    my insides
    were so....
    viciously beautiful

    addicted
    walking away
    from those pitiful eyes
    with a flimsy finesse
    ill be
    the morgues new cover girl.










    Submitted on 2005-08-15 00:37:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow, that's deep. Very interesting. and the end part is beautiful. How people judge people and how no one pays attention to the starving And the addiction that is life is only resolved by the rehab we call death.


    Semper Fidelis,
    Christopher
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by Soulraven | [ Reply to This ]
      Ahhhh... NO! REFUSE IT! Don't convey to society and its wallowing, abusive means of perfection. WHEN will people learn beauty doesnt only exsist on the cover of a magazine! OY. This piece is moving and disturbing and slightly morbid. Eating disorders are horrible. I wish this piece had a description, it seems impersonal without one. But if it's meant that way, more power to yea. Peace -rue
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by Rue | [ Reply to This ]
      for some odd reason the last line is my favorite one of all. but maybe it's because i'm twisted in my own little way according to my husband. keep it up
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by smiling death | [ Reply to This ]
      food is far too yummy to be thrown up... (unless you took a visit to the boo boo palace<taco bell> which, although delicous, oh so delicious, can cause havoc in your intestines and colon... lol) did you know that the majority of men that I know like women that arent... well... bones. curves are sexy. i have curves. it is part of being a woman. love it. enjoy it.
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by prettygrnEyes | [ Reply to This ]
      I would call this orange satire if I could, but I can't so I won't. This is morbidly gorgeous and dark. I absolutely love it. Prosaic lives, nice.

    You know that feeling when you're comenting on someones work and you don't want to give them a certain compliment because you think it might affect how they write in a negative way? Well this was good, but I don't want to affect your writing in a negative way (it's a good thing).

    Franticly,
    I hope you find an antidote
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by bloodwing | [ Reply to This ]


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