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    dots Submission Name: Midnight Sundots
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    Author: lmz
    ASL Info:    40/female/USA
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    dotsMidnight Sundots
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    Sitting on the rocks
    Forgetting the day
    White-capped waves crashing
    Against the shore below
    Late night sky
    Reflecting darkness
    Onto a somber ocean
    When upon the horizon
    A mystical sight...
    Subtle glow erupts into
    Passion fire burning
    The water's surface
    Flaming higher
    Splashes autumn colors
    Across the sea
    Moonlight madness
    Illuminating vibrant beauty
    Slowly ascending
    Deep dark orange
    Against a black background
    Breathtaking elegance
    Rising higher
    Revealing a perfect circle
    With a full face, all smiles...
    The midnight sun




    Submitted on 2005-08-15 13:58:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I don't know why, but this makes me think of an eclipse towards the end. The vivid imagery was wonderful in this and the prose itself was written well, but not so the reader was lost. I'm probably lost the on the real meaning behind this, but what I got out of it was still pretty good. Nice write
    | Posted on 2006-04-04 00:00:00 | by RumnMoxie | [ Reply to This ]
      You know, there's really very little I can offer you in the form of critique. All of your poems show good word choice, good grammer, good flow, yadd yadda yadda. You excel at all of the language parts of poetry.

    Where this piece stands out from some of your other work is the specific image behind the words. The moon can look enormous on the horizon. Living on the west coast, I've never seen moonrise over the ocean, although I have watched my share of sunsets. Your piece brought that dramatic moonrise to life for me.

    Well done,



    Steve
    | Posted on 2006-03-15 00:00:00 | by Lost Sheep | [ Reply to This ]
      The ironic title attracted me to read this poem , "the mid night sun" I would have called it a moon, but very creative of you. It seems that you always have so many comments that I don't know what to say. I love poems on nature, this one was good. Thanks for sharing
    Have a good day
    John*
    | Posted on 2006-02-28 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]
      Lorna, (found one I haven't read )

    You have such a beautiful talent for discribing nature.

    This was so beautifully done. It was a peacefull and yet awe inspiring setting.

    you had me once again beside you watching with wonder as the;

    Subtle glow erupts into
    Passion fire burning
    The water's surface
    Flaming higher
    Splashing autumn colors
    Across the sea

    You are truly an amazing artist that paints a word canvas with a brillant tapestry of colors and a kliedescope of feelings!!

    Very, very nice!!

    Steve
    | Posted on 2006-01-03 00:00:00 | by SHRINKSDR | [ Reply to This ]
      Us hill folk depend on the midnight sun
    to light the way for a moonshine run
    'Cause our cars they have no lights you see
    And that's how we allude the police!

    Hey I lke this poem Lorna and there is a certain bit of Nastalgia in it for me. Has to do with my teenage days, but, we won't get into that. enjoyed the read!
    !doc`
    | Posted on 2005-12-07 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
      so beautiful is this piece.. if I close my eyes I can see it and almost touch it..
    I love the full moon it's so
    special has to make you smile
    :) loved the picture you
    painted in this piece mystical
    it surly is :)

    hapi holidays
    Penny
    | Posted on 2005-12-06 00:00:00 | by pennymarie | [ Reply to This ]
      Good god!

    I figured I would add to your long list of comments here

    As usual you capivated your audience! I often remember those endless summer nights in New England where the moon seemed to captivate the entire night sky

    There is nothing more beautiful than the orange harvest moon refelting magnifcantly upon the still midnight sea. With the crisp autumn saly air flowing through my hair

    The majestic winter moon almost warming the sky with its reflective glory... I really miss New England, your soooo lucky!

    Like I said this completely capitvated me and brought to mind so many memories of beautiful seasonal changes and the huge harvest moon

    Another great write,
    Ella
    | Posted on 2005-12-03 00:00:00 | by stormyskye | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful Lorna
    This write created a picture in my mind of pure Beauty
    It was almost like a creation story and as to how the ocean and moon came to be
    Very beautifully written
    Loved it
    Take Care
    Your Friend
    Ron

    And by the way know sooner did I put out the Poem Imagination than quickly i recieved about 3 emails talking to me about creating a song out of it or by using it in the Linear notes of a new alblum
    An attorney I know suggested I take this one down because it was too good to leave out in the open
    That write might be the one that gets me recognized Lorna
    I really feel good about this
    Wish me Luck
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-12-03 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      You have quite a following.. and with good reason. Your descriptive ability is really very good and of course, this reflects directly in your writing. All I have read of yours just seems to flow and fall together.

    This gives the reader an image in their mind and pulls them in. I am not sure if you do this on purpose, or if it just your natural style. I suspect the latter is the case, as it is present in all of the pieces I have read of yours.

    Well written and beautifully descriptive - just as a 'proper' poet should be.
    | Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      I just loved the free feel and flow to this beautiful piece - I loved the accompanying picture and you gave such a vivid and illustrative description and dedication to the midnight sun moon!
    BRAVO~~~
    Love,Peace,Joy ~ Know,Experience,Joy~~~
    tif
    | Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved this one! I like moon poems any time, but your descriptions are snapshot perfect, and create a mood of awe at the sheer majesty of the Harvest Moon at the same time. My fave part was
    "Passion fire burning
    The water's surface
    Flaming higher
    Splashing autumn colors
    Across the sea"


    Thanks Lorna, a fave to be sure
    Sally
    | Posted on 2005-11-25 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! Lorna, your image creation was outstanding. I was first drawn to your title "Midnight Sun", I pictured a full harvest moon, which indeed it is. Sitting by the ocean, observing the waxing and waning, exciting yet at the same time has a calming affect on you.

    I, too, have been at the ocean, night time. It seems to excite all our natural senses. I love the smell of the salt water, watching and hearing the waves crash upon the shore, tasting the salty air, with bare feet playing with the sand.

    What a great experience many people never have. What a wonderful and beautiful thing created for our enjoyment. And, if this can be shared with one you love, how much better can life be.

    The imagery you created in your poem took me back to the times I was able to share this experience with Dick.

    Thank you for sharing this, and my friend, may
    God bless,
    Yvonne
    | Posted on 2005-11-16 00:00:00 | by dycrain | [ Reply to This ]
      this was beautiful!
    I figured since I read a sad one I would read one that wasnt to make it even

    You did a wonderful job on this, really discribing the images in such beauty.
    You do nature justice! Which is something I rarly say, but is true here.

    I love the title, very creative yet it fits so perfectly though.
    Really well done Lorna, my hat goes off to you!
    take care
    ~jennifer
    | Posted on 2005-11-08 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]
      Splashing autumn colors
    Across the sea...

    i could just see it! beautiful description of the full moon reflecting off the water. serene and delightful. wonderful images.. thanks for the peek at the full moon in all her glory!
    peace&reflection
    ~Cat
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      I am so pleased you were there to capture this image for us.
    It paints a beautiful photo in the mind and feels somewhat
    surreal in it's description. Perhaps more a Paul Klee than a Van Gogh, with vibrant colors and light consuming everything.

    Good plan maestro, I think you pulled this one together very well. Thanks for sharing, quite a write, my dear!
    peace and love,
    Nan
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      Wish I'd been there. What a breathtaking picture. Beautiful and serene. I must admit I've never had the pleasure of viewing a midnight sun.. well, until now, with your lovely depiction.
    Thank you for sharing this.
    I can image it in my minds eye. Sitting out on the rocks at late evening and then to have this wonder suddenly emerge over the ocean.

    Great read.
    Take care.
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      One of these days I'm going to learn to read the description before I read the poem and not after. I was sitting thinking, "Midnight Sun? Lorna must live in Alaska or something". LOL . This is a very beautiful poem Lorna. Very descriptive and colorful. Your words brought me to the shoreline to watch the moon ascend. There's nothing I would change at all. Thanks for submitting it.
    Bill
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by rankamateur | [ Reply to This ]
      BEAUTIFUL. Just beautiful. Il ove the imagery and the flow. It was like I was sitting there watching all this take place. I have never seen this happen yet. I'm always at the beach in the day time. But I will make it my aim to witness such a sight. This was breathtaking...and it was calming, all at once. Great job.
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      this was beautifully written. just got me away into my own little world for a second. i love the name, it sounds so elegant. i just wrote something that kinda reminded me of this, something about egg harbor, but yeah i cant find anything to say to you! i'm sorry, i'm crummy today, but this was great! some of it was a little off with the flow, but it didnt really catch me
    -steph
    | Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by playcrackthesky | [ Reply to This ]
      Everything I have to say has already been said...it is truly beautiful. I am going to ask my friend to read it and see what he thinks; I'm sure he will love it as well. Anyways, my favorite part is "Moonlight madness
    Illuminating vibrant beauty", but I really like it all.
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by thesinoftaima | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem is beyond breathtaking. i love this write so much. taking a moon glistening down on the water and it truly makes you want to see it at this very moment.
    Illuminating vibrant beauty
    that line makes me want to stop pause and re-read again. the word vibrant always captures all for me. one of my favorite words.
    but question when i read this i picture either the sun setting on the water or a full bright orange moon (which ive only seen a few times) sitting againist the water. either way very beautiful. i think watching the moon reflect on the ocean at night is one of the most gorgeous and romantic moments of life. i was actaully having quite a boring frustrating day but reading this has made me smile. you wrote this piece very elegantly and deserves the credit to sit upon my favorites. thank you for making my day with this piece.
    take care
    Jesi~
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by slntfirflm | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this prose/poem and felt the imagery was really wonderful. It takes skill to be able to paint pictures like that so the reader can get lost in the moment. I didn't like the style you chose to tell the story in though. It seems distant and fragmented/disjointed so that it becomes like hearing someone's account of how the sun looked instead of being able to step into their shoes. I guess that contradicts what I said at the start but all I'm saying is that you might be able to heighten the reader's experience if you consider some of those points. All in all it was a pleasure to come across this poem because the imagery was simply wonderful DB
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey Lorna! This was so wonderful! There's not a thing that I would change about this. I could see this moon rising so clearly. I love the huge harvest moons that you see in the country, they are so beautiful. I don't live near the ocean, but I can just imagine how exquisite this would be!

    Moonlight madness
    Illuminating vibrant beauty

    That was my favorite! Another great write from the amazing mind of Lorna!
    Candi
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
      fantastic account of the moonrise. it must be huge when it rises like that over the ocean. what better moment then to give your love a big smoochy with a big brillaint moon in the backdrop ahhhh, "amour en raison de la lune" [french]/// "Liebe angesichts des Mondes" [german],/// "amore in considerazione della luna" [itallian],/// "amor en la vista de la luna" [spanish]/// (((love in view of the moon)))
    no i dont speak those but it was fun looking them up, mike ps....fav ;)
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
      "To have an affair with nature..."

    I don't remember who said that, but it seems befitting of this poem. This piece sounds so content, so relaxed. As if you just shed work, spouse, children, complaints, arguments, trafic and every other mundane, head-splitting moment a single day can enduce...only to sit and stare at something older than human kind, older than God, older than time. It's that bone-deep meditation (be it conscious or otherwise) that's so dam hard to describe...but you came so perfectly close with this piece. I can't tell you how much I enjoyed this.

    Be Well
    ~Rachel~
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by nebnim | [ Reply to This ]
      aaaawwwww Lorna just pure beautiful magic , you have the ability to make me believe i'm there and i can see it and my god is it breathtaking , i love the night its so peaceful and great for forgetting your troubles.
    truly amazing
    take care
    Elaine x
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by lainie75 | [ Reply to This ]
      this is one dream I never had, my sun disapears and no moon. I only get ( sniff sniff) stars.
    The stars you see when you get whacked on a head. you know what I mean? lol j/k

    nice very nice poem.
    peace
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by dudethis | [ Reply to This ]
      Wonderful piece, Lorna! The perfect romantic backdrop, with Moon on Water!!!!
    | Posted on 2006-11-10 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Lorna,
    This is REMARKABLE...and I do mean it. Beautiful and breathtaking. The midnight sun, yes indeed.

    Flaming higher
    Splashing autumn colors

    I can actually picture myself looking up and seeing what you describe. Beautiful!

    With a full face, all smiles
    The midnight sun

    Girl, now I'm going to have to go and take a walk by the lake, probably tonight. Weather permitting. As always Lorna, I look forward to reading your pieces. Pure artwork! A great Write! Take care Lorna, wanda
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ]


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