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My Diginity


Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333 /325 /104
Words: 410
Class/Type: Poetry /Angry
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this is like a poem but it's also a person just talking to people. this isn't true either but if you don't like profanity than you shouldn't read this.


My Diginity



My diginity was lost in one sentece

how could they belive him over me

my life was ruined forever

but my life is fucked up you see....

i was born in the projects

raised in the hood

everyone looked down on me

i was so misunderstood

then one day i met this girl

she introduced me to this guy

little did i know back then

all they told were lies

so at the age of um fourteen

i started hustling drugs

at the age of fifteen

i was a hard core thug

but then at the age of sixteen

i started to pay attention to school

all though the teachers really sucked

most of the education ruled

but let me back up right there

cause at age ten i lost my virgo

so by the time i was sixteen

suck my dick was my logo

you see cause a while back i learned

that my actions towards guys weren't right

and as the nigga's who can't get girls would say

i had turned into a dyke

right.........

so back to my diginity

at age seventeen shit went down

and although wasn't still hustling

to that guy and girl i was found

the girl was okay but the guy was messed up

so he took me to a room

thinking he could get a quick fuck

right..... so he raped me

and i took his ass to court

he was left off with no charges

so i pulled out a newport

so..... i started thinking

i'm till a hard core thug

and although i wasn't hustling

i stil had alot of drugs

meaning.......i still owned guns

so he was walking down the street one day

and i thought lets have fun

i put the steel up to his head

not up top the little one

i shot his fucking dick off

and landed a good five years

so i didn't lose my dignity

you see i really didn't care

but what he lost was so important

and to you who think that too

all i have to say

is fuck you

The End




Submitted on 2005-08-15 14:59:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  well done... i liked it...umm...i think that u did have something that went on...cuz u seeem to write about rape lot...but who knows..man i like it..fav again...

-Suicidalchild51-
| Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]
  well well this was cool i think you used so to much but it was still a good poem dont get me wrong or anything but i think you had a relly bad life keep up te good work ok


Love, Serenity Blade
| Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by Demon__666 | [ Reply to This ]
  It was different. Sounds like you had a bad ass life. Iim sorry. BUt maybe things will get better if you keep writing... It was not a bad poem. It is good work. It made it more meaningful when you used profanity. Made it more real.
Keep it up.

God BLess
| Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by Poetic Cure | [ Reply to This ]
  Oh my. And you're saying this isn't from experience? Well thats good. Cause that's all f*ed up. Excellently written though. It reminded me of a story. Very creative. My favorite part was:

"i stil had alot of drugs

meaning...i still owned guns

so he was walking down the street one day

and i thought lets have fun"

Good thinking. I like the way you wrote this as if you were talking to someone. Makes it seem more real, you know? Anywho, this is awesome. I like it a lot. Great job

-nikkki
| Posted on 2005-08-22 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]


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