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    dots Submission Name: A Prayerdots
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    Author: Ola
    ASL Info:    18/f/USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 221/187/42
    Words: 391
    Class/Type: Prose/Religious
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    I know u r there for me
    But it’s getting harder and harder to believe
    The devil seems to be taking so many liberties
    I don’t know if my heart is strong enough to resist
    It is said that family is always there for you
    But for all families that ain’t always true
    My family doesn’t always stick up for me
    They believe in sticking up for others so we look like the happiest little family
    God I want to ask for forgiveness about what I’m about to say
    I know your commandments, Sundays the e holy day
    U say honor ur mom and ur dad
    But what if they are wrong
    Does that make it sound bad
    God, I’m sick of living under Satan’s influence
    Help me lord, I’m tired of this pain
    I know u approve whatever he does
    And I know u know that I’m strong
    But what are u supposed to do when everyone deserts you
    When u try to do good, but good just ain’t good enough
    I wont call it a heart ache, cos it’s a body, spirit and soul ache
    And I’m crying out to you to help me
    Deliver me, save me from this treachery
    Cos only u know what I go through
    Holy sprit, living water, comfort and drench me
    Lord, make me happy, lord make me not care what anyone thinks
    Help me make my dreams a reality
    Dreams no one thinks are worth coming true
    Dreams that no one thinks that I’ve thought through
    Dreams that should they come through
    People would feed off
    But lord I guess the bible was right
    I can’t depend on man
    Cos man will let u down
    Stab u time and time again
    Stand u until; u realize u just cant take no more
    God it’s hard being a Christian always having to turn the other cheek
    When u know they will hit u again and again
    God in heaven please help me persevere cos I know not what to do
    God help me in all that I do, think, feel, am
    Cos only u can be there for me to protect me
    Cos my heart is sick from bleeding and bleeding again
    But my promises I must keep
    Until I can make you happy, amen.





    Submitted on 2005-08-15 15:21:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was absolutely fantastic, my only comment is that the slang words such as aint and cos kind of detracted from the piece. None the less I respect you for putting your faith out there and sharing with us your words. It must be hard for you to keep your faith when others try to hold you down and I admire you for holding strong to your belief and not conforming to what is cool or acceptable I wish I had your strength and then maybe I would not have given up on my faith.

    Thank you, definately one for my faves list
    | Posted on 2005-11-04 00:00:00 | by babytinkerbelle | [ Reply to This ]
      This was very good! I think Gods loves us all,each and every one of us. I went through something similar when I was your age.
    Well I think I'll let you go for now.
    If you get a chance come read some of my stuff and tell me what you think ok?
    | Posted on 2005-11-04 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      Nyce poem I loved every line even tho it kinda had a slow start n was a lil lengthy but well worth it the only complant is the grammer but thats no big deal ya kno Great subject as well as your appraoch to it . I guess we all feel like that sometimes the key tho is to try and stay strong no matter what and wen u fall down and make a mistake juss get back up and keep going becasue the lord helps those who helps them selves remeber but Great Read glad i had the chance to check it out.My favorite line was:
    It is said that family is always there for you
    But for all families that ain’t always true
    My family doesn’t always stick up for me
    They believe in sticking up for others so we look like the happiest little family.
    Nice lil Rhyme scheme there
    By the way I'm No Talent check out some of my work sometime aigfht
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by No Talent | [ Reply to This ]
      That was very beautiful, very passionate. God is there for you. I know what you are going thru. If you ever need anyone to talk to, please email me. I know it can be hard sometimes. It really can. Sometimes, it feels like God is silent, absent, when he's staying quiet because he want's to listen to us. He wants to hear our fears, our dreams, what we are feeling, because He loves us like no other can, or ever will. God bless you, ola. I will pray for you. Email me, if you need a fellow Christian to talk to.
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by jlpurvis2001 | [ Reply to This ]
      I love any prayer as they are genuine thoughts to Great Spirit.
    It's hard, I know, when you have a dysfunctional family or seek acceptance and can't seem to find that or support.
    God hears you and is making you strong. Keep on praying and keepin on! Love,Peace,Joy! tif ; }
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it. Everyone has their own prayer for Him. It's awesome for you to have shared yours. A rythm of it's own to express what some just keep silent forever. Keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by smiling death | [ Reply to This ]



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