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    dots Submission Name: Irony Simplifieddots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 53
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 633
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    Bytes: 361



    Description:
       A poem I found cleaning up an old briefcase - circa July 1996.
    It's funny to see how we've come along as writers!
    Great week to all!
    Love,Peace,Joy!!!
    tif ; )


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    dotsIrony Simplifieddots
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    People check out of life
    does anybody care?
    Elvis left the building
    did you see him anywhere?
    Children choke on nothing
    no one gave them any food.
    Congress orders take out
    when they're in the mood.
    Is life depressing
    or is it irony?
    People laugh at violence
    as if it were funny.




    Submitted on 2005-08-15 16:37:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was good in 1996 and it still is. Your rhyme and meter work so well that they aren't really noticeable. The trend today seems to be away from these elements, probably because so many (poets) try to force them and many don't even understand them. I say what-ever-words. As far as the content goes, I do not see it as dark or cynical, but as a very good observation of the real world. Well done, Tiffany.
    | Posted on 2011-08-14 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, Tiff, what this piece does show is how your outlook on life the universe and everything has changed.
    I would expect to see such a cynical piece these days from the Princess of "IT"

    I really liked it though, a lot.

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Certainly all of this is true.. and you've put it nicely into poetic form. Not bad for nearly 10 years ago.
    I agree with Nan- this is a nicely discovered gem.. though short it speaks loudly.
    Sometimes.. even more now than then.. we (the people) tend to go through life so nonchalantly... seeing the needs of others.. but waiting for someone else to lend a hand.
    Cute thing about Elvis thrown in there.
    A good write Tif. Can't wait to see what else you dig up.
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Let me say you have really grown as a writer.
    If I where to read this from you today I would have passed this up as another teen poem about how much life sucks.

    But it is intresting to see how we have grown as writers that why it is good to save them old peices.

    ~shawn
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]
      My word - you have come a long way ! However the poem captuured your thoughts at that time and froze them forever. That is the beauty of writing exactly what you feel.
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good write...I agree completely...its a sad concept...that people are entertained by violence...its...not cool...
    But about your poem...its very very good...I like the title a lot..

    ...jessie...
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by jessie thomas | [ Reply to This ]
      Sometimes those old pieces have gems in them, even ideas that can germinate into something more tasty.
    It is so strange how we can laugh at misfortune, but learning to laugh at our own only happens when we are past the experience. Then we can tell a funny story about what happened.

    You need to clean out more places, it's amazing what we find.
    peace and love,
    Nan
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      I can see how you have grown up since then as a writer. You have made great progess. It was a very short and simple poem. And it did not have that gift of superb imagery you know have. But, it was still thought provoking. It seems you stopped stressing out over life now. This had a sense of darkness to it. You seem to be nothing but full of life and light when you write now. And I love that.
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]


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