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    dots Submission Name: my wavering strengthdots
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    Author: closebutremote
    ASL Info:    22/M/FL
    Elite Ratio:    2.69 - 54/77/16
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       I hate people saying anything to just get what they want. Even if it's the cost of another's emotional state.


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    dotsmy wavering strengthdots
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    I try to be strong as steel
    turning my back when you want something
    but what might come does not appeal
    you've wrecked my heart
    so how does it feel?

    You can't expect me to be friendly
    that's too awkward
    you want to hang out,
    why, to have sex?
    i'd love to

    you talk all nice till you've gotten what you want
    you're now gone
    only enough time was spent for what you got
    i dont want this to go on

    i again turn my back next time we talk,
    you begin to be nice
    i give in to your gesture
    and this is about the length
    of my wavering strength




    Submitted on 2005-08-15 18:00:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      nicely written. you touched on a subject that i think everyone can relate to. never underestimate your strength though. your inner strength and confidence will take you far in life, never loose that.. talk to you later, ella
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by stormyskye | [ Reply to This ]
      thought provoking poem. my favorite part is the last two lines.

    and this is about the length
    of my wavering strength

    it's a shame poeple in our life can be so cold,huh? but look up! you're stronger than you realize.
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by MMISS | [ Reply to This ]
      I know who this is and I hate hate hate him, can I kill him please????Or you can just say that I hat him and he will know and then I'll go to his house and punch him while he sleeps, that would be fun for me and we can do it together.
    I love you
    Denise
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by Forgiven | [ Reply to This ]


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