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    dots Submission Name: untitleddots

    Author: luvy
    ASL Info:    19/F/AZ
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 270/168/35
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Misc/Venting
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       i was just letting out some feelings becaus emy stepdad decided to be an ass

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    you look at me
    your eyes ablaze with hatred
    you try to hide
    but you just cant fake it

    you wake up wearing a mask
    you fake like you love me
    you come home and the mask come off
    theres no pretending you dont hate me

    your mother hates you
    your father hates you
    even your own kids hate you
    so tell me why i should love you

    but my real father i have love for him
    i can talk to him whenever
    but in your world its not suppose to be like that
    why because your kids dont care enough to buy a phonecard and call thats not my problem

    if you could physically hurt me you would
    but you cant so try to make emotional scars
    youve turned my heart into a mass of steel
    and anything u throw at me wont ever hurt me again

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      This is a very harsh poem. You can definetely feel the hatrid between you and your stepfather. Im assuming by this that you talking about him putting on this big act in front of your mother that says that he loves you but in fact he doesnt. I know how this goes. my step mom is the same way. Shes definetely got a decieving side to her. she keeps my father happy and that I care about but there are the times that one needs to ask thy self, Is my moms happiness worth dealing with him? just by the little that you wrote about your father you can tell that you love him very much, obviously much more than your step father.

    People look for love. If he cant find it in his own kids than looking to you is the next best thing for him?! He may treat you like crap to treat you that way, he may do it for the power he has against you or he may do it because he wants your love and doesnt know any other way to recieve it then by trying to force it.

    Well thats my input! It was a great write and threw out a lot of emotion and probably some baggage that needed to be taken off your shoulders. Its great to be able to write and let out your problems with people who dont criticize but only try to help! Anyways great write and sorry for all of the rambling on~!
    I hope that things get better for you and that hopefully things will work out between you and your stepfather!
    | Posted on 2006-01-19 00:00:00 | by manderz_1207 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. That deep. I dont really have much of a fatherly figure... unless you count my sad excuse for a dad. But I figure im better off the way I hear people complain about there's. I liked this. I thought it wa a great peice.
    | Posted on 2005-09-13 00:00:00 | by Drea | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah father figures can be azzholes. kaila's right, u can't be sad cuz we said so. i suggest moving to hawai because canada is cold. paris seems kinda cool though. oh back 2 ur poem. i luv the emotion and i go through the same shjt with my dad cept he doesn't mind resorting 2 physical pain. stay cool babe.
    | Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the emotion of this poem. you seemed to vent a lot of steem. i can really relate because i have step dad who i use to get in fights with. He never one and just kicked me out. Step parrents are rarely any good at being parrents
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by robertbwell | [ Reply to This ]
      gena i still love u! and u know wat u shuold show this to him cuz hes buggin me bcz he always makes u sad and my gena MY GENA! isnt allowed to be sad bcz i said so! and plus when ur sad i get sad cuz ur sad and then see no! well when we both get jobs we can move far away from here like paris or hawaii or CANADA! anyway see u in school tomorrow!
    ~akaila evonne~
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]

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