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    dots Submission Name: LOSSING THE BETdots
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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       this a lil more forward t hen most my work and i didnt reread it or touch it up at all i wanted to post it that way just raw sorta it referres to a still born child and the way lossing like that makes you feel cheated


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    dotsLOSSING THE BETdots
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    If the world saw what I saw it would simply turn away.
    You lay the cards down and realize the whole damn things a lie
    There isnít always water to break your fall.
    Sometimes there is no one to tell you its ok.
    You want so much to look at him but you turn your head
    You want to hold him but they cover his face and take him away .
    Your visions paint him as a monster .
    You should have known your imagination would spin out of control
    Should have looked down, just once maybe .
    Now you have to wonder and with each sip the picture is more distorted .
    Each pill makes it harder
    Something to sleep, something to wakeup,
    A lil something for the pain . Something that can make it go away .
    He screams in the night
    Your arms ache.
    They promise in time it gets better
    Let me be the one to say it.
    It doesnít it just becomes familiar .
    youíve lost the bet .




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      I can't relate to the aspect of haveing a child, but i can relate to haveing extreme emotion pain, to the point of questioning life. i really relate to the part about taking pills to function.
    i like the way it was written. like you said, it is raw and shows how frazled a situation like that makes your mind
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by robertbwell | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow...I don't know how it would feel to lose a child...I couldn't even imagine that kind of pain...
    But the poem was indeed raw...and I think thats lovely...this poem was very powerful and very well written...
    Again I say...very good job good friend...

    ...jessie...
    | Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by jessie thomas | [ Reply to This ]


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