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    dots Submission Name: the day you make me screamdots
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    Author: stormyskye
    ASL Info:    25/ f/new mexico
    Elite Ratio:    5.46 - 209/170/30
    Words: 327
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 1275
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       this one is actually not a dream, but a wish for future encounters! it seems like my love life is much more passionate in words then it is in reality. i guess i will always have my fantasies though.


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    I dream of him on the darkest of nights,
    He comes to me surrounded by an aluminous light.
    My body he knows how to please,
    All of my worries only he can release.
    I know not his face,
    But my fingers can always trace,
    The outline of his soul
    Through his captivating voice.
    Though we have never met,
    Only he can make my soul tremble,
    And my body this wet.

    You have always been the faceless
    Person in my dreams.
    Continuously ligering,
    And pulling me at the seams.
    I can always feel your presence,
    But tonight I welcome you into my essence.

    Come to me quickly,
    Before I explode.
    For the dawn we both shall loathe.
    I want to feel our first passionate kiss,
    All of my heart I am willing to risk.
    Just to have you deep inside me.

    I want to feel your powerful thrusts,
    For this moment has been my constant lust.
    Feeling our bodies in numerous positions,
    Ride me harder make my heart and soul listen,
    To the knowledge that my body already knows,
    You heighten my passion
    And make my juices flow.

    Our bodies are now one and the moment is right,
    I scream in anticipation as tears blind my sight.
    This moment we have waited so long for,
    Now that it's here I feel as if reborn.
    Into a new world under your control,
    Make me scream loader as my love for you flows.

    As we climax unto eternal bliss,
    You place upon my lips a final quivering kiss.
    Fill me once again with your beautifulness,
    Not for one moment do I want to miss

    But the dawn is rising,
    My love you must go.
    Until I feel you within me tomorrow.
    I know ine day we will finally meet
    My body,
    My soul,
    Only you can complete
    So for now we have our dreams,
    Until the day you really make me scream!




    Submitted on 2005-08-15 21:40:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Woo Hoo! This is a good passionate poem you have here. I think you did a nice job expressing your feelings and emotions in this piece. I also like how you tie him into your dreams, and what dreams they are too haha! What are you eating before you go to bed cause I wanna give it a try hee hee! Unfortunately a lot of our desires are only fulfilled in dreams but occasionally you find someone who just pushes all the right buttons and keep a smile on your face. Good job with the descriptions here too. You kept it tasteful yet very hot and passionate. Nice work here. Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-11-23 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      i got a hot sweat reading this,kept me going right to the end very enjoyable read,i used to have a dream about a woman similar to this whose face i could never see so i can relate to this poem.i liked it a lot !
    | Posted on 2005-08-26 00:00:00 | by gd66uk | [ Reply to This ]
      This to is good. I would love to see you explore other types of poetry. You have a gift for imagery. And you know how to get the reader to finish your poems. It was just an suggestion. I liked the flow and the imagery of this. And I feel you made think I was longing or lusting for some love myself! lol. Great job.
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      this was very very good!i coudl also visualize wat was happening. did this happen to u or is this just ur imagination! eitheir way it was awesome!
    ~akaila evonne~
    | Posted on 2005-08-18 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      very sexual you are. You seek something physical and emotional something that most men could never take the time to understand. Most men are afraid to ask what their partner wants. And that's sad but it happens after long hours at work they do not want to make their partner tremble and that's sad that our society has gotten to that. But your dreams will satisfy you plenty it seems, your dreams would probably satisfy many women numerous times over LOL but your words are so well crafted that it would be a shame to see you write about anythign other then this because you have such drive for your dream partner.

    Semper Fidelis,
    Christopher
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by Soulraven | [ Reply to This ]
      hehe. i like this sh*t. very awesome. i wanna have dreams like that!. good work. its amazing how much you wrote simply out of imagination! sweet.
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by graffitijeans | [ Reply to This ]


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