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    dots Submission Name: Paranoiddots
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    Author: loveispain
    ASL Info:    23/f/ME
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 283/198/51
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Okay this has like ZERO structure..and I am totally venting...lol...sorry...I just had to write this.


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    dotsParanoiddots
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    You love me now, right?
    So why does she, continually,
    Enter the picture?
    I know I'm yours.
    I know where your heart is,
    But my mind is still on her.
    My "friend", my "pal", my "sister"
    You loved her once, could you love her again?
    I know, that she,
    Is the farthest thing from your mind,
    I know that love is over.
    But burning in my soul, is a hate,
    For a friend that I should love.
    Why I bring it up, why I let it devour me,
    Why I don't just let it go, is beyond me.
    You try it, you try getting that picture,
    Out of your head, and tell me,
    How sane you feel.
    Cus I could lose it, I could break over this,
    And not even care.
    Jealous? No, I'm full out crazy...
    Paranoid? Probably...
    I know you love me.
    I know I'm yours.
    So why, does she, continually,
    Enter the picture?




    Submitted on 2005-08-15 21:41:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well I don't like to judge people but i can guess that your fears are down to either two things. Either your boyfriend is not making enough effort to make you feel special, not telling you he loves you enough, doing the little things that reassure a girl she is all he sees....or you have self-esteem issues and no matter what he tells you, you still think you are not good enough for him. When he tells you he loves you, your brain says "yes this is true, he does love you" but because you don't love yourself there is perhaps a little voice somewhere inside you refusing to believe he does truly love you.

    Either way, i know time has passed since you wrote this poem and i hope it has brought you two closer together, if that is what makes you happy.

    The poem was a very personal one i feel, more about self-assessment than wanting to share something with the world...you were more asking questions of yourself. And if you found the answers, then this poem has served it's purpose.

    I wish you luck, and hope i havent caused any offence with these comments, because none was intended.
    | Posted on 2005-12-22 00:00:00 | by Senna27NZ | [ Reply to This ]
      Because your Paranoid! Just kidding! You got all the questions that some of us ask ourselves in our own little heads. Everything in just this little piece with the exact rythm that these questions are asked. I like the tone. But if this is read straight through without looking for that tone then some just won't get it.
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by smiling death | [ Reply to This ]
      Maybe you know something about him that you are worried about like did this guy break up with your friend to date you? because maybe subconsciously you think he might do the same to you. But if not that you are just like everyone else young and care too much. Not a problem just a stepping stone. But the poem i enjoyed the enter the picture is perfect.

    Semper Fidelis,
    Christopher
    | Posted on 2005-08-15 00:00:00 | by Soulraven | [ Reply to This ]
      I felt every word of this poem and its just how and what i have been going through for a long time.......enough has become enough now and im moving on and painting a new picture of my own.......
    basically a beautiful canvass was tainted by another girls image smudged into it
    Take Care
    God Bless
    i really liked this poem.....
    touched me to know im not alone too :)
    | Posted on 2006-04-21 00:00:00 | by lostspirit | [ Reply to This ]
      heh good work. this is prob how my x thinks about me cause i keep bringing up the guy i cheated on him with and yeah...hes pretty nuts now and i think we're really broken up this time.
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by graffitijeans | [ Reply to This ]


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