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    dots Submission Name: Eye of The Beholderdots
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    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    57/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2777/1297/258
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       Obviously this is about my wife, but there's more to the story than that. I've always believed my wife to be beautiful, but my observation of her never made her lovely, she always possessed that attribute. What we believe we are is what we become, and what others see in us is only an affirmation of what was already there. The eye looks from within to reveal character, not from without to judge it.


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    dotsEye of The Beholderdots
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    I used to think
    you were
    beautiful
    because I
    loved you;

    now I'm sure
    you're
    beautiful
    because
    you are.

    There's nothing
    so common
    you couldn't touch
    it with a smile,
    a fingertip
    and transform dust
    to loveliness

    and there's nothing
    so lovely, m'lady,
    you couldn't elevate
    its divinity to a
    separate heaven.




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      Very well written
    I can feel the love you share with your soulmate
    I look forward to more writes from you as this captured a feeling in me dealing with my love for my mother
    I have never experienced love as love in a relationship before so its hard for me to visualize
    Great Write
    Ron

    And thanks for your comments To My Best Friend was written totally from the heart to my best friend Hes never let me down
    Take Care
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-11-07 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a sweet ode to your wife, simple and straightforward. beauty shines from the inside of a person, and we are blessed to bask in that glow. what a treasure you have in her and she has in you.
    @ Cat
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      A nice simple write. No complex emotions, no elaborate language but despite those assets, I didn't quite get the last stanza. She can't elevate divinity to a separate heaven? If that's correct either I missed something or its a typo, most likely the former. Anyway, I enjoyed reading this, nice work.
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      To me, the best kind of love poems are ones like these.. that come from years of knowing someone and still seeing beauty in that person.
    I enjoyed this and the description given of it.
    Looks may be what first draws us to someone.. but inner beauty and love is what keeps us.. what holds us together.
    I like the first part where you state it isn't your love that makes her beautiful.. but the fact that she "just is".

    I too, didn't quite get the last part.. but it sounds nice ;)

    A very lovely write.
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      How beautiful , your wife will be so pleased with this and i'm sure she feels the same , you are lucky there arnt many who find there soul mate but i can see from reading this you know that.
    take care
    Lainie x
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by lainie75 | [ Reply to This ]
      It's always nice to see such an infatuation between a husband and wife ;) Gives some of us hope. The poem itself was done well, short and to the point but not hurried by any means. A simple description of something words cannot completely describe. I was a little lost near the end, but other than that I liked it. Good job. I'm sure you're wife will like it.
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by Leon Cabartin | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very beautiful. To me the last stanza simply means that there's nothing so lovely that she could not make it even more so. She elevates the beauty of everything. Which is a fabulous sentiment. Thanks for writing this I really enjoyed it. And I can find no fault with.
    Bill
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by rankamateur | [ Reply to This ]


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