[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: MY PEN, MY SOULdots

    Author: solemnpen
    ASL Info:    18
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 303/339/42
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1050
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 579

       this is just my thoughts about what i do, im hoping im not the only one that feels this way

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsMY PEN, MY SOULdots

    The pen will never stop
    The pen just bleeds
    The ink keeps flowing
    Until I succed
    Wicked thoughts
    For wicked people
    My pen shines
    Like a wooden cross
    On a church steeple
    Crossed emotions
    Have people confused
    Talking of bad times
    And writers abused
    Take time to know
    Take time to care
    Feel what I write
    Don't make opinions
    And just glare
    It's heartfelt
    It's my mind
    I give to you
    My pen, my soul
    I entrust to you

    Submitted on 2005-08-16 00:16:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||
      wow...these words were excellent...Loved it...i havent commented on soem of ur poems so i thought i would...hell im glad i did...this was good [censored] man...keep this sh!i up..

    | Posted on 2005-09-16 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really good! A very honest, noble poem! I think all writers can certainly relate to this one as it speaks volumes of truth! We write a lot of things about inner thoughts and feelings, some good, some bad, some reality and some fantasy. But it is an extension of our minds and our soul. It is intimate and has a purpose and should be treated that way. I really like this poem! You have done a brilliant job writing it! Take care!

    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      You are not the only one - and you say it with a flare unique to you

    "Take time to know
    Take time to care
    Feel what I write
    Don't make opinions"
    That is very strong and right on the money

    "And just glare
    It's heartfelt
    It's my mind
    I give to you
    My pen, my soul
    I entrust to you"
    And this is just excellent - the words are...can't even come up with a word to give it credit
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is an interesting perspective. The notion of not making opinions was a little vague. After all, writing is a persuasive form, which generally causes the reader to react and often form an opinion. Otherwise, there was a lot of common sense in your words.
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]
      that is something that both poets and MCs have in common whether they know it or not. we all use the pen as a "weapon" and we let it bleed on the page. ur not just writing, ur taking a part of yourself and putting it in the pen. then that part of u is forever preserved in the works u write. nice job cade.
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm touched to say the least. You put it very well. We, as writer's, make ourselves so vulnerable to everyone else that reads our work. We openly explore our fears, demons, happiness, love and heartbreaks, not to mention everything in between! You worded it very well in your way.

    My Pen, my soul
    I entrust to you

    That was the best! Poetry is the world in which I myself live, it's probably why I'm still alive. It's the cheapest form of therapy I can think of and really allows you inside of a person- see how they tick. This was another great write on your part and extremely honest, as always! Great job!
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
      "My pen, my soul I entrust to you" this line was awesome. It showed your openness and vulnerability as a writer and as an individual. Dreamweaver is right as poets we put our emotions to paper for others to see, a glimpse into our mind, our psyche, our thoughts and emotions we bare open to critism. We truly are trusting ourselves to others. Kuddos on the write it was great.
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      the pen is the most powerful weapon on this mutha [censored] planet, and there is no doubt in my mind, that through a well placed metaphor or an oratory over polictics and poverty, we can fulfill any need, cure any illness, make peace with any land or people. ~Mr. A.K.N.
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by Aknahlij_d 1 | [ Reply to This ]

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]