Short yet effective. I think you tapped into something everyone has expericned but no one as really thought about. It always amazes me how something so short and simple can be so profound and engaging. But I guess that is poetry in a nutshell. I loved it.
This is interesting. A bit short as I feel this topic could really take off into something a bit longer and more detailed but the idea here is very good and says a lot in few words. The question asked at the end of this is a good one too. Overall not a bad little write you have here. And ending this with a question leaves the reader to reflect on past experiences and ponder themselves which I like. Pretty good short poem. Take care.
So interesting. Your comments are longer than the poem :). Yeah i have too many times looked at someone and wondered what they were thinking when they were looking at me. I liked this because it was right to the point. I should prbably do one like that too. I am straight forward when I write like when in english class. I skipped the bs and got to it. Well good one. -james
hehehe, oh I can say that many, including me, can relate very well to this... is it common love, or is it a special love for you and you alone? oh these questions travel quite intensely through the vehicle of everyone's mind... your work is a nice short day-to-day experience, but I think that through this work here, you could expand these thoughts into maybe a longer and even more poetic feel to it. thoughts and experiences, no matter how cliché (as far as them being written down), are what makes up an individual, and the more creative you work with your ideas and deliver them in a not-so-common way, the more other people with the same experiences will appreciate reading and even deciphering. overall, smooth write, but could still be worked with for the better, jc prescott