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    dots Submission Name: manufactured emotiondots
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    Author: robertbwell
    ASL Info:    23/m/Wyoming
    Elite Ratio:    3 - 92/150/75
    Words: 327
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 735
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    Bytes: 2030



    Description:
       I wrote this about a month ago expressing my lack of emotion towards anything and the inability to understand and express the few i have. I was surpized as to how acurately i was able to describe how i felt in side and that is my goal. it helps me figure myself out.


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    it has been so hard to express my self now-a-days
    the rain is falling
    the seasons are changing
    and my emotions are stalling

    I still feel them
    but only inside
    they become trapped within
    like guilt from a sin
    but never catagorized

    they just blend into a general discontentment
    and then fade away
    leaving me with a fasod
    when i wake to meet the day
    i never measure up to the odds

    my feelings seem so fake and manufactured
    like they originate from some foriegn land
    shipped to my head and heart
    because of cost and demand

    I can't afford to feel
    so i bid to the lowest supply
    only to awake to a short coming
    and own a lie

    maybe these vague feelings are real
    those i have put away for such a long time
    now unrecognizable
    as if they came in disguize

    but what are they hiding from?
    and why do they hide inside?
    instead of filtering though
    to become materialized

    as a tear, a hug, a geture of love
    a kind word instead of a verbal shove

    these feelings for sure own me
    as i own my sin
    but they will never begin to show me
    their true origin

    even as i write of them
    i am unsure of the context
    i am still fueled by an indesicive complex

    what can i write to set them free?
    what can i feel so that i may be
    at peace?

    I could go on and on with this ryming pattern
    i could verbally duplicate the rings of satern

    but to what end?
    what would it bring me?
    my emotions would still not let me be
    no matter how much i beg and plea
    when i wake tomorow, there they will be
    unidentified and weighing heavily
    with no one to understand
    nor lend me a hand
    to offer more than the efforts of a man




    Submitted on 2005-08-16 11:19:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      d only emotions dat u mention feeling r those of guilt n discontentment.. obviously u'r goin thru a rough patch.. n diff ppl hav diff ways of copin wid der issues.. even if it all happens on a subconcious level. point is dat its just a phase n all will b gud. don stress over it. d poem was so great dat it made me wanna reach out 2 u n offer u some words of encouragement. u did a gud job. my only issue is dat sumtimes it feels like u'r repeatin d same idea over n over again.
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by Sanjhana | [ Reply to This ]
      hey. i know exactly what you mean. its like. i can't actually decide how i feel. its really weird. its like..for example i say "yes, i'm in love with you and i want to spend my life with you" but then i a few hours later i'm ready to say "goodbye, i don't really care if you're here or not"...but the thing is...i don't know which one is the truth.
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by graffitijeans | [ Reply to This ]
      I think a lot of people will really relate to this one...which in part makes it so awesome.

    You have a lot of really original kick a s s lines...I think I am seeing a pattern of this in your poetry...which is awesome, stay cool.

    they just blend into a general discontentment
    and then fade away

    THis was awesome...my fav line.

    Peace
    Jazmine
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this a lot...i really liked the stucture of this poem...I can relate to the subject of this poem a lot...I've felt this way many a' time...
    I really liked the stanza...
    'my feelings seem so fake and manufactured
    like they originate from some foriegn land
    shipped to my head and heart
    because of cost and demand'

    Very good job on this poem my friend...I look forward to reading more...

    Peace Love And Happiness My friend...

    ...jessie...
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by jessie thomas | [ Reply to This ]


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