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    dots Submission Name: No Answerdots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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       Again I am a lil pissed...bah...I just wanna talk to Cory man. I loves him.

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    dotsNo Answerdots

    only four quarters
    this one call has to count
    this one chance to live
    she holds her breath and dials

    no answer

    with every ring her hopes drop
    and these tears are boiling over
    closer now to burning her skin
    she closes her eyes and she hangs up

    no answer

    standing there
    left with four quarters
    only one more way to go and if it doesn't work she's fucked
    she holds her breath and dials

    friendly vioce actually picks up

    " I need your help" she says
    " I need you to make a call"
    " I'm sorry I won't do it" he says
    but she knows he isn't sorry at all

    "Please just this once" she says
    desperation threating to heat her eyes
    "I'll do what I can" he says
    but even as he says it she knows that it's lie

    she sits by the phone
    so she can answer
    a call that won't be returned

    now she's left alone
    completely drained of hope
    empty now and so she cries
    beats herself up for wasting her time

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      The feeling of letdown, as i know this feeling. The desperation of waiting for someone to pick up, that i need to desperately talk to, and nothing. and "that vaccums"
    | Posted on 2005-12-03 00:00:00 | by rAbit | [ Reply to This ]
      The desperation felt in this piece was expressed beautifully. I almost felt as if I were standing in the rain watchin her. Nice write. Keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by Dark Angel | [ Reply to This ]
      Thais made me wanna cry...I liked this poem a lot too...
    I really liked the stanza...
    'she sits by the phone
    so she can answer
    a call that won't be returned'

    It's...meaningful...ya know?
    I am sorry about you and Justin...and me and Justin...and Justin in general I suppose...
    I liked this poem a lot...in this one I could feel the emotion as well...
    Very good job my friend...

    | Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by jessie thomas | [ Reply to This ]
      once again another good one. This one seems more free and i like how you used the third person to describe your self. An i can relate to the part about calling and not getting an answer. It gives you a sick feeling in you stomache and makes you feel helpless. i hope things go well.
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by robertbwell | [ Reply to This ]
      this is an incredibly emotionaly draing poem... in a good way though. desperation and sorrow is drenched in your words. by the way i love kurt i miss his music Ssooo much. they found his body on my birthday. my birthday has been bittersweet ever since. anyway, good write. talk to you later, ella
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by stormyskye | [ Reply to This ]

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