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    dots Submission Name: The Shadowdots
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    Author: silent ryder
    ASL Info:    22/male/LA
    Elite Ratio:    3.78 - 11/16/4
    Words: 15
    Class/Type: Haiku/Serious
    Total Views: 804
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 91



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    dotsThe Shadowdots
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    The shadow calls you
    It waits longing to smother
    God can't help you now




    Submitted on 2005-08-16 14:50:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    i agree with lmz and Black-Wall at the same time. except i like haiku's. I think you could turn this into a kick ass poem. but i also agree that this can be looked at in different ways. great perspective. you did a nice job with such a short piece.

    take care
    Jesi~
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by slntfirflm | [ Reply to This ]
      Well I think this leaves alot to the imagination! The shadow could be so many different things...drugs, relationship, murderer...etc...
    This is a good haiku! Leaves so much up to the reader to determine! Most haikus are very topic specific where this is very broad! Nice write! Take care!

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Its is everyones artistic view to say. Hiakus suck ass. If I were you I would turn this into a 400 word poem and rock ass with the thoughts behind it. Thats just me.
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by Black-Wall | [ Reply to This ]


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