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    dots Submission Name: Walking Down the Aisledots
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    Author: longwinterdays
    ASL Info:    21/F/WA
    Elite Ratio:    4.99 - 204/190/64
    Words: 238
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       My good friend Nic Ashley died Two Tuesdays ago. He meant the world to me and I don't know what I will do without him. He was everything....and everything he taught me was amazing...he is the best teacher I have ever had.


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    dotsWalking Down the Aisledots
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    Walking down the aisle
    I remember seeing your smiling face
    As if you had no problems
    And your life was full of grace

    I recall it as if it were yesterday
    Although it was over 14 years ago
    I remember everything, I remember it all
    Especially the way you teased me just so

    Walking down the aisle
    We begin to file into our seats
    Chatting away anxiously
    Waiting for the Pastor to begin his speech

    Always singing together
    Even though we were always off-tune
    Still loving every moment
    And hoping to do it again soon

    Walking down the aisle
    She begins to smile at you
    She has yearned for this very day
    And the long awaited "I do"

    Love was something we both hoped for
    Something that we always dreamed of
    We alwys wanted to find that "special" someone
    And you were lucky enough to find your true love

    Walking down the aisle
    My wondering eyes began to fill with tears
    Praying we could bring you back
    Making this reality just another fear

    God decided to call you back home
    To the place he needed you the most
    Sitting directly by his side
    Praising Him, the Heavenly host

    Walking down the aisle
    I will remember all that you have taught me
    All of the times that we have spent together
    And the person you have taught me to see




    Submitted on 2005-08-16 15:01:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a lovely heartfelt poem! I am so sorry for your loss! This friend obviously meant a great deal to you and this poem reflects some of how dear he was to you. You did a wonderful job writing this and I imagine it must have been very difficult to do. It is a great poem! Best wishes and take care!

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi,
    This is a beautiful, passionate inspirational devotional write.
    First, I'm so sorry you lost someone who meant so much. A special someone always have a special place in your heart. You understood God called him home, and you accepted this. We keep the special ones alive with memories. Of course missing them physically hurt, but we can keep them alive in our hearts and minds. I do believe you are a strong person, stronger than you might think. Your friend would want you to continue on. Continue writing and keep that person's memory alive. A great write! Take care...give yourself a big hug from me!lol. wanda
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ]
      What a wonderful, heartfelt tribute to your friend. I'm sure Nic is smiling from above, a sparkling smile just for you!
    I can relate to this because I have had recent losses in my life too, and I, too, have prayed that my two sons had not really died, and that it was just a natural fear of every parent. But, no, it's very real, and I am reminded of it every day that goes by, and I don't see their smiling faces, or hear their voices on the telephone.
    I wonder, though, did you marry shortly after Nic? Is it you walking down the aisle with your own true love, just wishing that Nic could still be here so he could share the moment with you? Sorry if I'm wrong, hon, but that's what I felt...My sympathies to you in your great loss. I know that it isn't much at a time like this, but I have to tell you anyways...keep on being strong, because Nic needs all of your positive energy for the first few months to get to where he needs to be - and negative energy will hold him down, and prevent him from soaring to the heights of where he is meant to be. God bless you, and bring your heart comfort during this time of tragic loss. My heart goes out to you, more than I can say... luv cher
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by Inducted_Kitty | [ Reply to This ]
      where or was the person in the poem getting married and then the other died..what is that what I am getting here or did I miss something? Anyway the poem in a whole I think could have been shorter only cause I felt it was about a stanza or two too long. The rhyme in a few oplaces seemed a little forced but nothing serious(ex:stanza 2 and 6)
    good imagery though--heart felt write
    LT
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by LameMansTerms | [ Reply to This ]


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