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    dots Submission Name: Poetic Minds.... Part 2dots

    Author: solemnpen
    ASL Info:    18
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 303/339/42
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       This is just the second of a 3 piece saga.. that describes the feeling of performing your poetry in front of the crowd.. and the emotions you get..

    this is from personal experience... so any comments, welcome

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    dotsPoetic Minds.... Part 2dots

    The crowd screams encore
    As the rapper seems hardcore
    The sweat shines in the spotlight
    Hearing the screams, a great night
    The mic grasped tight
    With these words, he starts his fight
    Traveling down the path of his mind
    Showing everybody his wraith
    He's bout to stop time
    Reality hits hard
    As he walks off stage
    As he finishes off the second page
    Emotions run deep
    The veins in the words are delicate
    A wrong mark, and they will bleed
    Tears or Fear?
    It's only the beats you need to hear
    Whether it's from your heart
    Or from the music
    You just gotta tear it apart
    The second chapter has been complete
    My dedication, not the money, is what pays
    This is the end of the second phase

    Submitted on 2005-08-16 16:08:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I remember performing one of my poems in front of the class, good god I was shaking more than a child on crack. (excuse the cheesy joke ) I find it easier to sing, than to say it. Juust the fact of taking your words...your own "blood" (so it seems) and throwing it out there is nerve-racking. Wondering if they'll hate it, love it, but then wondering 'why the [censored] should I care?' But the rush, oh the rush of performing is worth every minute of nervousness. Alright now I'm starting to ramble, a good second piece, tell me when the 3rd comes out!
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by MorbidAngel114 | [ Reply to This ]
      i've never performed any of my peices in front of a crowd so i don't know how it feels but it seems 2 be more of an adrenaline rush. hey i'm still waiting 4 the 3rd piece cade. i know u won't disappoint homie.
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      As a spoken word artist, I must say that you described some of the feelings on stage very well. Nicely done. The fear is crazy the first couple of times but the applause and standing ovations overbears the fear. Nice piece...

    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]
      this is so awsome! damn i loved how the words were expressed...how they made the description clear!
    you have a great talent in your poetry..how they always have the rap tone and how they make the message so simple!
    | Posted on 2005-08-18 00:00:00 | by Kay | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked this. it was really straight up and it said what needed to be said.

    i swing my sword from an amplifier chord
    even when the writing is slow, yo, i ain't ever got bored
    floored from the verses i embrace and curse out
    in front of twenty strong that i call my crowd
    i scream my word loud so the meaing can be felt
    in the blood trickling down your neck
    my mic and my pen silenced another one~P
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by Aknahlij_d 1 | [ Reply to This ]

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