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    dots Submission Name: Battle with Abusedots
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    Author: deathbelow
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 34/43/17
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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    Description:
       This is a really confusing poem to explain..I guess it's about how inside I always have a battle going on and I beat myself up about things and If I were to show it on the outside this is what it would look like....ya....confusing!


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    dotsBattle with Abusedots
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    warm and wet stream down my face,
    Takes me back to another place
    Taste of tears, and alcohol on your breath,
    Who took you away? The ultimate theft,
    My battle scars are only reminders of where I've been,
    Don't ever what to go back tere again
    Bruised and bloody lip,
    You cut my face again, just another "little" slip,
    Not to mention this broken heart
    You got what you wanted in whole not in part,
    It stung as they came to the surface of my eyes,
    didn't want to show you, cuz your "Oh so powerful" to the one who crys,
    But you still beat me once again
    If it wasn't yours, whos fault was it then?
    Sun glasses and long sleeved shirts,
    Tell me now what am I worth?
    Sometimes I just dream that I could fly away,
    Find myself in a happier place
    But then I'd wake up and see,
    The only one beating me up was me.




    Submitted on 2005-08-16 17:11:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I understand at first I really thought you were talking about being abused. I've [censored]ed up my life due to drugs and I hurt myself and others so many times. It took me 4 years to finally be able to say I'm not addicted anymore but it doesn't change the scars. I totally understand what your saying. Truely excellent write!
    -Jenny
    | Posted on 2006-12-13 00:00:00 | by Darklonelygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree. Not hard to understand at all. In fact I think that this poem is NOT about a guy, but about yourself. Reading the opening to the poem leads me to believe that. And I think you did a wonderful job portraying this internal battle.
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by Dark Angel | [ Reply to This ]
      Really realy good! It is refreshing to read someone pouring out their DEEPEST feelings. Sometimes in life there is nothing wrong in beating up yourself - but don't do it all the time, as it will eventually drag you down. There are ALWAYS positives to be found - if you know where to look.
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      this is not hard to understand. I truly understood it. The ex of yours would used to beat you, make you cry and tell you you are nothing with out him and you believed it enough you would hide the bruises. I seen it alot.
    Hope you had gotten away from this guy by now.
    peace and pm me if ever need to chat
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by dudethis | [ Reply to This ]


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