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    dots Submission Name: Threnody For A Destroyerdots
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    Author: Abort_Chaotic
    ASL Info:    19 almost 20
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 201/172/50
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Vampire
    Total Views: 853
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 542



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       I'm not done with this, I'm going to re-release is later on when I am done. I'm looking for views on this, things to change and what not.
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    dotsThrenody For A Destroyerdots
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    Threnody for a destroyer,
    his mind without the abrstract reality.
    The butcher.
    The lamb.

    Eaiser for the slaughter.
    Born for free massacre.

    Bleeding decades behind a blade;
    mastered to the hilt,
    unsheated at all times.
    He'll convince you that you're not you.
    Then cut you in two.
    For he plays mind games,
    acquired from the flames.

    Time forever lapped over him,
    he never decays,
    far from death he potrays.




    Submitted on 2005-08-16 17:36:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow. I cannot believe that no one has commented on this. I think that it is wonderful in a brutal way. Very creative. I am impressed by this piece. Great write. I hope to read more of your work.
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by Dark Angel | [ Reply to This ]


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