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    dots Submission Name: The Story of a girldots

    Author: Drea
    ASL Info:    18/f/nowhere
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 289/142/53
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Story of a girldots

    She sits in class
    Doesnt say a word
    A teachers
    Pet they call her
    But not a voice
    she's heard
    She goes home
    She's got the rope in her hand
    She's terrified
    But this is her only chance
    To escape these voices
    All around in her head
    She wont take anymore
    She puts herself to rest
    Her mother comes home
    And is overcome with dread
    She looks in the closet
    To find her only child dead
    It's a sad event
    And everyone cries
    After a while
    a few day go by
    And everyone goes back
    to their normal lives
    This is a true story
    of a tragic end
    To a girl who just set trend
    Suicide is at it's best
    No one knows
    who'll be next.

    Submitted on 2005-08-16 18:15:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked this poem.And it's so true.The things people do to others and make them want to die.So they get so fed up with it they just happen to do it.And you never know who will be next.So true.Very nice.

    | Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by ArtichokeMosher | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice way of showing how life has its trials and tribulations.

    You are a good poet and need to keep on writing about stuff in life cause that's what you seem to do your best at.

    Even if it doesn't seem perfect just keep it up and don't stop even if you feel you have nothing else left to write about.
    | Posted on 2005-09-30 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hm... Should "Know one knows" be "No one knows"?

    In all, it's true that such things do happen, and it being a trend, I have to agree as well. It's sad, isn't it? You manged to bring out this tragedy well, and also how life goes on for others, related or not. Keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by whchong | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice poem I can relate. I like how it captures how much of wt life is like when that happens before and after, but in such simple words
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by Silent_Tears | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this because everyone can relate.I like how you refered suicide to a trend.It does seem to be that because everyone seems to be talking about it or knew someone who did it.I'm sorry if you feel like you want to kill yourself sometimes.We've all been there.Keep Writing!
    | Posted on 2005-08-18 00:00:00 | by giver_of_death | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good. It had a nice flow. The tragic outcome of some of our children is so sad.
    Your words brought out the tragic but how one must go on. But I'm sure not everyone is normal inside.The love ones will live with it the rest of there lives. Keep writing
    God Bless
    | Posted on 2005-08-16 00:00:00 | by Poetic Cure | [ Reply to This ]

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