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two -------------------------------------------
stuck between the love of two
go with her or be with you
immortal questions
eternal lessons
its gonna take time
to make up my mind
i know what you want
but i might not want the same
others are jealous of whatever we had
i want you happy not depressed never sad
stay by me and ill choose wisely
lets start again and and it will be alright
i ahve always said we dont get to choose who we love and when we love more then one it gets messy i have been ther elost my life reminds me of a song stay with teh one who loves or go back to teh one you love anyways very nice work i loved it
This was short, sweet and simple. Nice. The flow was off in some areas. Other than that it really was good. Nice write. I enjoyed the other one you wrote too. Keep it up, and please don't be discouraged by my critacism.
Submission Name: two
