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    dots Submission Name: UNEVENdots
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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       i found this in the bottem of my purse on a wendys napkin hehehehe let me know what you think


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    dotsUNEVENdots
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    This car ever moving.
    I reclaim a single droplet of rain from my ankle.
    Bringing it to my lips I let the mountain image take me.
    Sweeping gently over me
    The vacant eyes in the back seat can no longer reach me .
    I am safe
    Far from the constant movement.
    Far from speeding in the rain .




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