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    dots Submission Name: Flesh of a Fresh Loverdots
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    Author: reveries
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 54/74/23
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       this poem will be on the CD I'm releasing in September...although feel free to message me for info on my first book....I hope you enjoy it.....feedback....good or bad is always welcome


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    dotsFlesh of a Fresh Loverdots
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    Do you whisper secrets
    of the sun into the moons ear?
    and do you mock waves as they
    crash into themselves
    watching them self-destruct
    and rebuild again?
    I have long wondered of your wit
    your astute comments
    your lonely eyes.
    And the way your body screams
    "I'm Sorry"
    as your tongue peels skin off fresh
    secrets
    like peaches
    and how often do you crave
    the flesh of a fresh lover?
    to taste skin that has been promised
    to another.
    Or are you yourself that skin?
    Do you turn the world inside out
    to get a glance of her face?
    and ignore dull eyes that sleep next to you
    or are you just another, who wants back
    what they never had?




    Submitted on 2005-08-16 23:32:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Unlike WildCat, I didn't get lost in this. I liked it, it brought a fresh prospective (metaphorically) to a beat up subject. The opening I found very unique and extremly well done. Great job
    your friend
    ben
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]
      Unlike WildCat, I didn't get lost in this. I liked it, it brought a fresh prospective (metaphorically) to a beat up subject. The opening I found very unique and extremly well done. Great job
    your friend
    ben
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]
      Unlike WildCat, I didn't get lost in this. I liked it, it brought a fresh prospective (metaphorically) to a beat up subject. The opening I found very unique and extremly well done. Great job
    your friend
    ben
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't know why this thing posted my last comment 3 times. I am sorry to fill up ur comment spaces.

    your friend
    ben
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    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't know why this thing posted my last comment 3 times. I am sorry to fill up ur comment spaces.

    your friend
    ben
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    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]


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