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Deep in the Heart


Author: Inducted_Kitty
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Fuck it, say what you will...too little sleep, too much pain...


Deep in the Heart



Deep in the heart of Texas
the world is so magnified,
Where everything seems to be larger
than anywhere else worldwide.

Deep in the heart of sorrow
where unspeakable pain runs wild
Where pain seems to be unforgiven
when you deal with the death of a child.

Deep in the sea of trouble
you can bury your dead at sea
If you look up the word despondant
the picture would be one of me.

When your heart is so fragile and broken
When you've reached past your limit and then
When your heartache is more than imagined
When you just can't remember when...

Was I happy before this thing happened?
Was I just trying to live my own life?
Did I try to prevent this from happening?
Was I too busy being mother and wife?

Oh, how could this tragedy happen?
I thought everything here was just fine
I wonder how death could come find me
and take what has always been mine.

And why would he take my beloved
My first born was truly my own
Don't tell me it's what he was meant for
Or that his seeds had already been sown.

I reach into darkness to silence
I call out your name every day
I just need to know where you are now
I need only to hear your voice say...

That deep in the heart of Texas
things aren't larger than they really are
But deep in the heart of a mother
a lost child always leaves a deep scar.

A scar that will never heal nicely
A pain that will always be worn
In her smile, which comes rarely if ever
When she loses her dearest first born.














Submitted on 2005-08-17 00:50:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this is very sad and the poem shows every bit of what it possibly can. your writing from feeling not from mind. its beautifully written and perfect even without unoubvious words.

Was I happy before this thing happened?
Was I just trying to live my own life?
Did I try to prevent this from happening?
Was I too busy being mother and wife?

:im sure anyone who has lost a child will feel feel exactly like this, this poem could help alot of people that realate.
godbless
char
| Posted on 2006-01-22 00:00:00 | by ohgpanic | [ Reply to This ]
  A brush dipped in tears. A portrait of sadness...life. Life. This is beautiful. No pretense, no fancy metaphors. Bare bones, stripped down emotion. The rhythm is excellent the flow...the emotion. A painting of part of ones life. Nicely done. I hope you find peace.
| Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by Malcolm Bishop | [ Reply to This ]
  I have to agree with the previous comment. very well done. Full of emotion and clear.

"I reach into darkness to silence"
I definitely understand the sentiment behind this thought.
| Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by Rukiya Faizah | [ Reply to This ]
  Omg! that's horrible. Im not a parent so I do not know the feeling of losing a child but I lost my little cousin Sarah from an abusive father... If you haven't read "Hush Little Baby" check it out if you want. Anyways, everyone has those moments where they feel as if life can't go on without that beloved person here anymore or having pain but it does. And things will eventually feel a little bit better. Even if its just a smudge. I can't say that not to worry your shild is up in heaven For I believe in no heaven/hell or god/satan. I couldn't pick just one line or one stanza I loved the most but these two stuck out to me
"Deep in the heart of Texas
the world is so magnified,
Where everything seems to be larger
than anywhere else worldwide.

Deep in the heart of sorrow
where unspeakable pain runs wild
Where pain seems to be unforgiven
when you deal with the death of a child."

Those stanzas kept me in tact and made me want to read more. I loved the way you portrayed this piece. And I'm terribly sorry about your loss.

Take Care
Jesi~
| Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by slntfirflm | [ Reply to This ]
  Hi,
First of all let me say I'm deeply sorry about the loss of your son. It's hard to lose a child. So many plans and expectations we want. I hope you writing about your loss helps to ease the pain. I do believe your baby is in heaven with the angels playing in God's playground. Cher, you take care, you have a "Special Angel" watching over you. You will feel him near. This is a good write! wanda
| Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ]


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