Ahhh...! The never ending conquest for love and a successful relationship! This is a good poem! I enjoyed reading it and liked the comparison of love and the ocean. Love always starts out just great dont it? But then, slowly, over time, it all comes to the surface and you realize you are floating in polluted waters! Ha!I think this is a well written expression of an all too common problem in life and I like the picture too...that wouldn't happen to be you now would it? Maybe your screen name has something to do with that assumption! Nice one! Take care!
I think I should do that...I might just go to the nearest beach and wait for a ship to come along...maybe "the one" will fly off the breaking ship into my arms...that would be nice, but the beach is far away... I liked your approach, and hte metaphor of hte ship coming and then pulling away like the tide, making you stand alone at the end. It was fairly creative, and the idea was passed along quite well. Though I would ask you to change one thing...the title of your poem, it could maybe have more of a gripping/eccentric title in my opinion...but that is merely my opinion, not yours. Id like to see more poems like this, objective yet subjective, metaphysical yet real, and overall full of thought. keep writing, its appreciated, jcprescott
very intristing dad i like it i think im getting the picture of a lost relationship and the whole ocean nautical themeish thingy is cool its very good for a late nite stab into the blundering darkness of poetry.(i have no clue wat i just said but it sounded smart)