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    dots Submission Name: The Silent Ryderdots
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    Author: silent ryder
    ASL Info:    22/male/LA
    Elite Ratio:    3.78 - 11/16/4
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThe Silent Ryderdots
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    The silent rider rides a black horse
    Knowing everything
    Seeing everyone
    Deciding what will be the next challenge
    Who will be the next course
    In teaching a lesson
    On how to look at life
    Maybe it would be easier
    If you had a close encounter with my knife
    To woes of any circumstance
    Victims at random or being chose
    It is all for entertainment
    As the silent ryder
    Continues to ride through the night




    Submitted on 2005-08-17 01:29:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this poem just proves how cocky you are

    "Knowing everything
    Seeing everyone"

    you wish
    is that how you look at your self
    you need medication for that [censored]
    and if you have some then your on the wrong ones or takeing too many
    it sounds like santa gave you the wrong toy too many times
    a rhyme scheme might help but deleting it would do it more justice
    and you still havent told me what you do
    | Posted on 2005-09-05 00:00:00 | by Dark Romeo89 | [ Reply to This ]
      quite a sinister and mysterious mood u hav created here. . . quite different to the stuff i like but thort it was good- just check the spelling& i think a sorta rhyme scheme would hav done it more justice.

    Keep spreading the love
    Nadia*
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by AfricanPrincess | [ Reply to This ]
      I decided to delete that first comment and write a new one since I couldn't even see straight more the less read correctly. And again sory about last night... anyways, I love the personality this silent ryder portrays. very mysterious and spine chilling. Sounds like my kind of guy! lol... This person kind of reminds me of the movie Saw and how he had victims of the ones who took life forgranteed or didnt care. and made them try to escape their fate if they truly wanted to live.
    "In teaching a lesson
    On how to look at life
    Maybe it would be easier
    If you had a close encounter with my knife"
    these lines gave me that feeling. I like how you say the silent rider rides a black horse. Makes this poem even more mysterious. Makes me want to know more of this silent ryder. yet, no one knows who he is.
    "Victims at random or being chose
    It is all for entertainment"
    I also enjoy seeing that silent rider does this for entertainment. Though these kinds of things when people do these things for fun its some sort of diesase that can't really be fixed. So of course, they lock them up.
    "As the silent ryder
    Continues to ride through the night"
    Those last lines gives me the thought and probably others that this silent ryder just contiunes finding new victims to please himself and not really have guilt or saddness. which adds character to this silent ryder. The thing that sends chills up my spine even more though is that whole scene with you and Cade (solemnpen) last night. Kind of creepy if you ask me. Only because I've have someone watch my every move before. Come to find out they had been watching me for about 3 weeks before anyone in my family noticed. Some teen from my school. He went to juvy for awhile. He was charged with other stuff too. But anyways,
    "Knowing everything
    Seeing everyone
    Deciding what will be the next challenge"
    these lines here give me the feeling as if someone could be watching me now. Like I have to look over my shoulder every few seconds just to double check no one is around. And makeing sure my blinds are shut and doors are locked tight... By writing this it makes me even more paranoid then I already was... and let me tell you I am a very paranoid person...

    take care
    Jesi~
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by slntfirflm | [ Reply to This ]
      you ride on a horse like a dick
    you woe to much as a [censored]
    disrepect only to get attentions
    you are afraid your name will never get mentioned
    silent ryder
    challeneges noone or stalks noone accept those men in thpngs on jerry springer
    [censored] you are not anything on this site, you are just a little child that never got breast fed and daddie left your sorry ass alone in a corn field
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by dudethis | [ Reply to This ]
      I see you have this piece labeled as serious. Let's be real with this...this is dark just like the other post of yours that I just read. Also, you have "ryder" or "rider" spelled two different ways in this piece. Which is it? When creating a character you have tobe very detailed if you want that character to sell. Unless there is a second part to this, your character will be just that...a silent rider...

    It's Just Business,
    X
    | Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]


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