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    dots Submission Name: Weed Poemdots
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    Author: RequiemOfDreams
    ASL Info:    20/M/NJ
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 97/140/38
    Words: 196
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 38310
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1273



    Description:
       This was inspired by a few songs some being "Weed Song" by Bone Thugs N Harmony, "Dr. Greenthumb" by Cypress Hill, and a bunch of other songs. Weedism- prejudice against weed- is not fair.


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    dotsWeed Poemdots
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    The morning is nigh
    It's time to get high
    Last time tonight
    Sleep will come with no fight
    Load the green in this blunt
    Please don't make it a runt

    What is so wrong with Mary Jay?
    Is it so bad to feel like a sun ray?
    All nice and feelin' fine and dandy
    Takes away worry; makes me hunger candy
    They say its a drug thats bad
    If you believe that, you've been had

    Was that blunt hit by a blight?
    If we're gonna get high, lets do this right!
    Heres my green, continue to roll
    After we're done, we'll smoke my bowl
    Tie it off, damn that is big
    Its really in nice fig

    Socially alcohol is okay
    Although it makes people pass away
    But marijuana is a "killer" drug
    But it causes no graves to be dug
    Cigarettes kill thousands of users
    Even when they're not abusers

    What you may have heard is slanted
    Because this "drug", was actually planted
    Unlike cigarettes, it contains no chem
    All natural baby, tell that to the rest of them.

    If everyone smoked a blunt the world would be a better place.




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      *glances over a few other comments* wow.....I liked this one and it was fairly funny just because I thought it would have made more of a point free-verse. but I hate when people say weed is the 'gate-way' drug and it leads to other things.....some people go to 'harder' stuff before they ever even bother with weed and I know some people that drink on occasion and smoke weed but haven't really touched much of anything else....it's funny to see how many people believe something just because they've heard it; and the problem isn't the drug itself in any rate, it's a person's choice to abuse that substance just b/c they can... nice write.
    ~jess
    | Posted on 2006-08-22 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      I find it amuzing that you had so many pot heads comment on this piece. One love eh? But anyways, I guess I liked this. But I have to say this. An illusion that capitivates the pot smokers of the world is that it casues no harm. LIE. Pot leads to all other drugs, and those do kill. So in a round about way pot aides and abeds the addictions that kill so many souls... BUt anyways this was smooth. I give you that.
    | Posted on 2006-08-22 00:00:00 | by manicsmuse | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmmmmmmmmm...

    First...I don't get the Mary Jay thing...It's suppose to be Mary Jane...Unless you just made that up yourself...I don't know.

    This was definitely a write for a bud head...I can relate to a lot of it. Except...weed does make me worry...It makes me tense as well.

    This was good except I think that it's plainly stated. There wasn't anything unique about it.

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-11-14 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      well, i mean yeah, it rhymes, and it's divided up into groups of 6 lines, but it's pretty damn plain. nothing really interesting, some very irresponsible statements, probably not on purpose, you're probably just ignorant as to the biological effects of THC as well as the actual smoke you inhale. i'd rewrite the whole thing. if you're gonna write a convincing poem then you need some intense energy and some more color. like Rue said, get creative with it. hope this helps.
    | Posted on 2005-11-11 00:00:00 | by treybur | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, who knew that you could get so many deep thoughts on this poem? I found it terribly amusing, maybe cause I know too many people who would be sitting here, bobbing their heads in agreement with you. I do not partake, but it's mainly because that sh*t is illegal, and I have enough to worry about without getting arrested for possesion or something equally lame. Plus, i'd be one of those goofy *ss giggly people that you couldn't shut up. I know this for a fact. I've had waaaaay too many contact highs. But this was a very funny, not to mention truthful, view of marijuana. I am in total agreement on the comes from the ground, all natural thing.
    | Posted on 2005-09-14 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      hahahahaha... this is sooo funny..
    everyone can justify their addictions in some way or the other..
    if nothing else, its the other side of the story.. a defense for the dopies...
    and i believe everyone's voices should be heard.
    i think your poem is damn cute... adding it to my faves.
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by Sanjhana | [ Reply to This ]
      i'm not going to comment on the words or flow of poetry but on the content...i dont agree with you at all, mary jane is a drug just like alcohole and can be abused...it's symtoms lead to psychosis and depression like most drugs, however it is one of the weaker drugs out there, it can...like booze be used to heal {cough medicine and cleansing wounds} but it is us who are the problem not the little green weed look at opiates and the like...i think the problem that people abuse and don't use...honestly how many joints do you smoke a day?
    i enjoyed the poem though for what it's worth!

    thanks for the write and inspiring this feedback, i'm sure you will agree...?
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by orpheus | [ Reply to This ]
      Actually, I just read a atrical a few days ago in the newspaper saying that weed is better than alcohol but the only reason they keep it legal is because it would start a riot. Also, weed doesn't make you lose your common sense like alcohol does. Weed is even better than cigarettes. You actually can not die from weed. You can get alcohol posioning though. It takes 800 lbs of weed to kill a rat. A RAT! think about how much it would take to kill a human... a lot. More than you could ever possibly smoke in your life. I am a stoner myself and I sure have smoke a lot but probably no more than 10lbs. I toke up at least 7 times a day. Also Id rather be in the care with a stoned driver than a drunk driver. Ive been in the car with both before. I 100% agree that if everyone just smoked a blunt they would feel a lot happier. I broke my bowl the other day... stepped on it... anyways, the only thing I see wrong wtih it is that you eat a lot. Because I also being who I am did a survey type thing and comes to find out 37 out of the 45 people I interviewed that smoke weed perform better in class high then when sober. And most stoners have better grades at our school. except they rather toke up then go to class so their performance goes down hill. I love me some weed. Sh!t Im high right now and if anyone has something againist weed they can kiss my ASS! lol

    take care
    Jesi~
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by slntfirflm | [ Reply to This ]
      I found this very cute. I agree with you that if everyone smoked a little now & then, the world would be a better place and Cheetos would rise to the top of the stock market...
    The rhyme is actually kind of catchy...
    One little added note for your defense of Mary Jane - Harvard completed a 30 years study on Mary Jane a couple of years ago ~ smoking dope before you were 20-21 (when the brain is fully developed) was considered a no-no - because it could affect someone the same way alcohol and heroine do - addiction...it further stated (and I'm not quoting so don't shoot me) that AFTER 20-21, they could find no mental or physical problems with people who smoked in moderation...
    I personally was offended by this...

    No one asked me to take part in this study
    Nice write
    Lisa
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with you on some points and others I don't. Marijuana is safer than alcohol and cigarettes. That's why I don't understand why it is illegal. However, everyone can't smoke marijuana. It effects various people in various ways. Some people get all giggley, others start doing stupid things, some fall asleep, etc. I sure as hell don't want anybody falling asleep behind the wheel of the car. I believe however that marijuana is not a drug because it grows straight from the ground. No additives or nothing. It's an herb like the teas and crap that USFDA endorse. Anyway, that's my view. Keep Smoke Alive!

    X
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]
      "Hey, let's all blaze
    to the new old craze
    Ow! my eye! [censored]in seed
    Burnt by my own damn weed!"
    ha ha ha...sorry, I digress...very very good poem. I thought it was funny anyways. This natural God given herb has been bashed for way too long now, and it's benefits are many. Like anything else though, it's moderation in use. Good poem, made me laugh out loud. cher
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by Inducted_Kitty | [ Reply to This ]
      Someone I know recently pointed this out to me. On the show Cops when they have domestic dispute segments and they always seem to be due to alchohol or those other drugs. You never see someone call the cops because their partner got too stoned and started beating them, ya know? But as with all things, I am sure there is an exception to that rule. I liked the message although thought some if it felt forced and trite in some spots. But still a very interesting piece to read. Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Bob said it "Everybody must get stoned". I like the message here for sure. I find it amazing that companies go to such a great degree to keep pot smokers out of their employees but are unable to test against crack and smack users. Alcoholics are tolorated and smokers pretty much ignored (as long as they smoke out of sight) I think the poem got a little choppy and lost it's rhythm here and there but hey, being stoned does enhance creativity but doesn't help putting those ideas down on paper. Next time make notes then structure the piece when your straight. Nice work! Dan
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by dmm | [ Reply to This ]
      BRAVO!
    As a proud pot-smoker, I have been wondering for a very long time how it's possible that this little plant is illegal, yet anyone can go to the corner store and pick up a pack of cancer inducing, carconegenic 1 inch coffin nails. It just doesn't seem right.
    My thought was if the gov't regulates it like alcohol, sells it in gov't ran stores, like alcohol (here anyway) why not? They get thier bull[censored] taxes and we get high. It's a win-win. Anywho, great write, a must for the faves.
    Traci :)
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by onetruesmartass | [ Reply to This ]
      Ahem. Bloody brill man, weed's killed 0 peoples. I hate weedism. You would like the books, "The Emporer wears no clothes" By Jack Herer, and "Steal this book" by Abbie Hoffman... you know, if you haven't laid your fingers on them. I like the write, not only because I have had a lot of experience relating to it, and am a proud marijuana advocate, but it's well put together. You could make it more colourful. C'mon! Hookahs, bongs, that tingly feeling when you stand up too fast... Maybe something of the paranoia... I have notebooks full of this kind of poetry... keep it up. And good job, I think this can go in my favourites, because it's one of the few weed poems I've seen on eliteskills. Thanks again, -rue
    | Posted on 2005-08-21 00:00:00 | by Rue | [ Reply to This ]


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