Description: My son is now 1lb 15.7oz almost 2lbs, he is so beautiful....and I just caint imagine what I ever did without him. I can only visit him in the hospital now but he will be home when he is big enough, untill then I will wait for my angel.
Life is different
No more about one
Now is time to see this future
Hold true my decisions
Become this new person.
I have you to look forward to
And it consumes my mind
In such a wonderful way
I hope you will always know that.
Now in your sleep I watch
Your breathing
A slight kick
As your arms touch your face...
I have never seen something so beautiful
I could watch for hours.
This is something so new to me
I never thought I would understand this
As others spoke of it
I disregarded
But now it has become my reality
My night and day
My living and breathing
All only for you.
And now I'm forever changed
And it is exactly what I needed
And I never even knew.
It has been a few decades since my shildren were born, but I remember the awe and wonder of new life as if it were yesterday. Thank you for capturing the "parent" moment in its true light.
That was too sweet- I went "awwww" outloud several tymes and got strange looks from surrounding people. But screw them- they suck. I'ma saw 'awwww' again- you deserve it!
Everyone who has children says it's the greatest thing that's ever happened to them. From the sound of your poem, this is true for you. I seems this message comes from the heart and long before you son is able to come home, you've prepared for him a loving a warm space. Tiny being,, but oh what a love his mom already has for him. Best of luck to both of you, and many blessings, nansofast
I loved the introspection of this piece, the realization shared, the transformation of you, the poet, through your baby son. Just beautiful.
And I must say, poetry aside, my heartfelt hopes and prayers go with you. May your boy grow up to be healthy and strong and fat! Or maybe a body builder tipping the scales at 280 pounds! Something amazing, yes, that if nothing else.
Thanks for sharing these powerful changes with us. We're all with you, now.
How sweet. Too bad you couldnt hold him in your arms right now, but that time will come. I just like the hope and love in this piece. It shows so well...as does the feeling of happy anticipation. Have a good one and keep smilin'
Oh how powerful! And every word and sentiment ring so true. My goodness does this ever carry me back to when mine were first born. Wonderfully written and arranged. There's nothin that I can see to criticize whatsoever. Thanks for submitting it. And I'm glad to see your boy is doing so well! Bill
Hmmm...I like it. It talks about the beauty of no longer being alone, of being with the person you were supposed to spend forever with. As for the structure...Well, I kind of thought it could have actually used a structure. I mean, the stanzas are all different lengths and there's no rhyme. Now, rhyme probably wouldn't have helped in this poem, but...I dunno. It might be something to think about. Nice poem though!
a very feeling one yup. it has a good arrangement and i really can't think of anything else to say. O.O
ah idk what it's like to have a kid (and dont' plan on it for at least another 8 years or so...) so idk how it would be like for you. yup yup have a day!
It's an amazing transformation from being a "self" to becoming a mommy...I was a mom at 16 and I remember having so many fears...could I do this? would I be able to give my daughter all that she needed? would she be proud of the decisions I made? and now...almost ten years later I look at my beautiful daughter and think...though many looked down upon me and some still do...God...he had a plan...and what a wondrous plan it was.
Same goes for you my friend...even during these hard times and what I am sure were your darkest hours...He has a plan. *wink*
Awwwww...This is a very emotional piece. By the way congratulations. There is definitely a change when one becomes a mother. I saw that in my girlfriend. She liek totally grew up five years within a few weeks. Quite amazing. What a beautiful, touching poem. I hope everything turns out okay with your child...
its so beuaitful the emotions bleeds off of it. it's very powerful your words all paint a picture of emotions and its so like awwww. (cant think of acctual words.) good job i really liked the last stanza too.
Submission Name: Transformation
