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    dots Submission Name: The Winddots
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    Author: 3TOMANY
    ASL Info:    29
    Elite Ratio:    1.78 - 145/50/20
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 261
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 406



    Description:
       Recently someone very close to me passed away and between me and my aunt we came up with this for her. I just felt like sharing it with someone.


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    dotsThe Winddots
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    By 3tomany and her Aunt D. Biggs

    Like the grace of a dove your beauty,
    your kindness, grace and eloquence
    will be remembered.
    And as the wind softly blows against our skin,
    we feel the soft caress of your hand
    on our face gently wiping our tears.
    A faint smile will touch our lips as we tuck you away in our hearts and gently place you in our minds.




    Submitted on 2005-08-17 15:47:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      a clear and beutiful write dedicated to a loved one who has passed on
    though it is short it does not matter in this case because you expressed your emotions perfectly
    i have had a lot of relatives and friends pass on in my life
    i lost a good friend i grew up with when he was 22 by a car accident
    just know that writing heals

    im sure your loved one is very proud of you

    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-10-17 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      very pretty remembrance of a friend lost. i would only suggest you drop the second "grace" since you've already used it in the previous line. either way, this is a touching poem for a friend gone. it does read like a whisper. i am sorry for your loss, it does help to write about it. thanks for sharing.
    ~Cat
    | Posted on 2005-08-26 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      When I read it, it sounded like it was whispered so that only you're loss would hear it, but it deserves to be out in the world. Congrats to you and you're aunt this is a really great poem though I wish it could've been written on better circumstances. I don't know why but I kept on reading it and picturing the people I lost, but that's nothing you should be worried about. I give it a nine out of ten. Keep the poems coming!
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by Naymless | [ Reply to This ]
      That was very beautiful, but I have a grammer complaint for you. "you're" should "your." It sort of reminds me of God. I was thinking about God when I read it, and then I read your descriptions, which still made it pretty good.
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by jlpurvis2001 | [ Reply to This ]



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