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Mistakes


Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333 /325 /104
Words: 128
Class/Type: Poetry /Sorry
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I basiclly made this one up as i went.


Mistakes



they say everyone makes mistakes
you made the worst of all
your mother always told you
that your game would be your downfall
but out of all those girls who loved you
i think i loved you the most
cause i was the one who walked away
instead of fighting your hoes
I also fought some of your battles
but you didn't really give a fuck
and when i came home with black eyes
you told me life was tough
So i toughened up a little
cause with you i couldn't be a punk
but when you died
it had me crying for a month
you underestameted your whores
and i underestameted to
so when she came over with that gun
the one she shot was you




Submitted on 2005-08-17 16:11:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I didnt quite understood what your main subject was. And you flow was good till last verse. It kind of went some where else.
Im sorry if I'm not making sense.
I am new at this comments stuff. Keep writing.
| Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by Poetic Cure | [ Reply to This ]
  cool...but...umm...why did he make a big mistake...she made the mistake...KILL THE B!TCH!lol! but ya this was really good!

-Suicidalchild51-
| Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]


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