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    dots Submission Name: Coffeehouse Writerdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 50
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsCoffeehouse Writerdots
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    There's a boy in a coffeehouse booth
    who's determined to be Dostoevsky.
    Intently he writes golden words
    into a yellow legal pad.
    His gaze meets yours,
    and you realize he has eyes
    like an old man,
    but he's just a teen
    projecting his old soul
    through his words.





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      I can relate to this as easily as falling out of tree--the little coffe shops I have operated at various times in my life--have always had glorious art, pottery, sunshine plants, music--to lure in the writers, poets and musicians ---sure the wannabee's come to but they soon fade into the background--I have heard and read such beautiful songs by young tree-planters, run-aways, students --truck drivers--you name it--but it's when you read this really classic tingly-feely stuff from teens--with those "old souls"--that you know you've heard something special. great write amy
    | Posted on 2004-04-19 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful, sounds like a young man i saw down in new york city, just writing. Down there every day he was. Left behind one of his pages once and I snatched it up, Excellent stuff. You really captured the soul ofthisone Cuddle, lovely write. Great imagery. ~Sicobe R. Crow
    | Posted on 2004-04-15 00:00:00 | by Crow | [ Reply to This ]
      The image you're relating is very clear in my head, so nice write. One thing though, every time I've read something written by someone who writes in a coffeeshop, their work is trite and self obsessed... and yes, I do write in a coffee shop not a block from where I live and love Dostoyevsky... uh-oh. Seriously though, there's no better place to find good artists, good conversation, and good games of chess where I live than the local coffee shop. You did a good job of capturing a snippet of that feel... I like this piece.
    | Posted on 2004-04-14 00:00:00 | by DevilDinosaur | [ Reply to This ]
      The image you're relating is very clear in my head, so nice write. One thing though, every time I've read something written by someone who writes in a coffeeshop, their work is trite and self obsessed... and yes, I do write in a coffee shop not a block from where I live and love Dostoyevsky... uh-oh. Seriously though, there's no better place to find good artists, good conversation, and good games of chess where I live than the local coffee shop. You did a good job of capturing a snippet of that feel... I like this piece.
    | Posted on 2004-04-14 00:00:00 | by DevilDinosaur | [ Reply to This ]
      The image you're relating is very clear in my head, so nice write. One thing though, every time I've read something written by someone who writes in a coffeeshop, their work is trite and self obsessed... and yes, I do write in a coffee shop not a block from where I live and love Dostoyevsky... uh-oh. Seriously though, there's no better place to find good artists, good conversation, and good games of chess where I live than the local coffee shop. You did a good job of capturing a snippet of that feel... I like this piece.
    | Posted on 2004-04-14 00:00:00 | by DevilDinosaur | [ Reply to This ]
      yay!! something different and good to read lol. I really liked this, very mysterious. Im wondering if you wrote this from a personal expirience or something.
    | Posted on 2004-04-14 00:00:00 | by Exodus Night Sky | [ Reply to This ]
      Your poem is Neat -O-...Kinda funny, in a way. Yet, has that black to white feeling too.
    | Posted on 2004-04-14 00:00:00 | by Vibrant | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the golden words on yellow paper...I saw this in my mind....I have seen eyes like that. An old soul reborn into a new body. Startling. And how can we explain people like Mozart, composing music while still a toddler. No one taught him.....yes, old souls.
    | Posted on 2004-04-14 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      Well you know I hate when you stare at me like that, all I ever wanted was a cup of coffee and some peace and quiet! Now the whole world knows I'm a time traveler!
    YOU KNOW I'M KIDDING, I love you!
    | Posted on 2004-04-14 00:00:00 | by Clayton | [ Reply to This ]
      When I write I often times feel that I'm "Projecting [my] old soul Through [my] words"
    I feel like an old soul most of the time. I've spent my whole life, well for as long as I can remember, taking care of everyone around me, and somehow knowing what to say and when to say it. Eventhough I'm a man, my friends sometimes call me Mama. It's weird how you can have those old eyes, and feel old inside, but not be...at least in linear years.
    | Posted on 2004-08-30 00:00:00 | by Jonathan Lennox | [ Reply to This ]
      Love it.
    | Posted on 2004-04-26 00:00:00 | by redthewitch | [ Reply to This ]
      great imagery in this write, could really see everything that you were saying, it was great, keep it up!
    | Posted on 2004-04-15 00:00:00 | by gigglygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      I knew this boy, i may have even loved this boy at one time. As usual, I enjoy your poems and look for them. When I don't look they seem to pop out of no where and bit me in the ass. I really did enjoy this one, especially the determined to be Dostoevsky line. By the way, love the dress. Lisa
    | Posted on 2004-05-31 00:00:00 | by matissesgirl | [ Reply to This ]


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