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    dots Submission Name: Cry and Cry Foreverdots
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    Author: HECATE_Sservant
    ASL Info:    18/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 120/141/42
    Words: 180
    Class/Type: Poetry/Cutting or Mutilation
    Total Views: 330
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1319



    Description:
       It sort of just came off the top of my head. Sorry if it'a a little jumbled. and sort of confusing. I'd love any ideas to make it better.Enjoy...


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    dotsCry and Cry Foreverdots
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    Lay on the floor...
    Cry and cry forever.
    Cause you can't change.
    Cutting lasts forever,
    Don't smile...
    I promise, it hurts too much.
    Just let them watch you.
    Your mask is broken...
    The worst isn't here yet.

    You cry and bleed...
    They watch you dying.
    They're too scared to help.
    You want to dissappear...
    Too bad they won't let you.
    Cause now your pain is funny.
    But the worst is still to come.

    Your crimson river is amusing to them.
    Hide your blades...
    Keep them away.
    They're not your friends.
    They cause you pain.
    Don't do it...
    Let them laugh.
    Don't worry the worst is coming...

    Humans aren't your companions anymore...
    A sharp piece of steel is all you have.
    That's the worst...
    To know you can't go back.
    They welcome you with laughs,
    for the pain you have inside.
    The worst is realizing it's not them that's changed, it's you.
    It's all your own fault...

    Lay on the floor...
    Cry and cry forever.
    Cause all you want is,
    something you can't give yourself...




    Submitted on 2005-08-17 17:53:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very good, it wasnt jumbled, ive felt like this, its hard, people just dont understand, it was very descriptive, like you could have used common words to describe stuff, but you didnt, i like the 3rd and 4th stanzasa lot,, your very talented @ cutting poetry, favorites addition!, lol,
    kudos
    ~whatever14
    | Posted on 2005-08-28 00:00:00 | by whatever14 | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem is totally my favorite of all of yours yet!!!! man you use so much truce in this...it descibes so much in such a short lil' poem...i feel like when i read it that it described me and who and what i am and am becoming...awesome job!!! yeah keep it up...im going to try and put more poems on here but i just started skool and i've been SO BUSY!! well ttyl! g.j. again!
    love and death:
    casey
    | Posted on 2005-08-18 00:00:00 | by Razorgirl | [ Reply to This ]



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