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    dots Submission Name: No Tomorrowdots
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    Author: loveispain
    ASL Info:    23/f/ME
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 283/198/51
    Words: 184
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       Um...I wrote this a long time ago...before my boyfriend left for bootcamp. Now that he's in Iraq, this means a little more to me. Everyone should cherish every moment they have with someone they love, life doesn't guarantee tomorrow, so I guess in short, I learned the hard way, that taking TIME for granted, comes back to bite ya!! lol..thanks for reading!


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    dotsNo Tomorrowdots
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    So easy to be happy,
    To laugh, to smile,
    Knowing that tomorrow,
    You will see his face.
    Feel so secure,
    Knowing tomorrow,
    You will look into his eyes, kiss his lips.
    Tomorrow you will hold his hand,
    Hear the love in his voice.

    Take for granted time you spent,
    Swore that you wouldn't, but in the end,
    You know in your heart,
    You counted on, relied too much upon,
    Tomorrow.

    Now you sit in silence,
    Cold, and alone.
    You see things all too clearly.
    His smell lingers, his touch you still can feel,
    Lips you still can taste, but all you have,
    Bittersweet memories.

    What happens when your life becomes empty,
    When you have nothing,
    When all you've lived for,
    Walks out the door.
    What happens, when all you want to do,
    Is tell him you love him, just one more time.
    But you can't, because tomorrow,
    When you open your eyes,
    And all you see is darkness, you realize,
    That tomorrow brought you nothing,
    Tomorrow is today, and today,
    He is gone.




    Submitted on 2005-08-17 18:18:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it was pretty good. I don't mean to sound "ehh", there's just a lot of the same type of poems written over and over. Much love.
    | Posted on 2006-09-22 00:00:00 | by Logic | [ Reply to This ]
      This states the truth because we all at one point or another take everything for ganted. i take my boyfriend for granted alot and am trying my hardest not too. i fear that when i start taking him for granted too much, that will be when i loose him. but we keep the head up and learn to not take anything for granted.
    erin
    | Posted on 2006-01-14 00:00:00 | by devonsmom03 | [ Reply to This ]
      i love this poem , its so true ... you truly dont know what you have until its gone and you put that into words beautifully keep it up its gettin added to favs lol
    | Posted on 2005-12-08 00:00:00 | by blacktearz | [ Reply to This ]
      Full of emotion, pain, sadness, and love. A poition that ensures an excellent write. I really can't or don't want to pick fault - it was perfect.
    | Posted on 2005-09-18 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      You really put it out there in this. I love the last lines. They were a very appropriate ending to a poem that seems full of endings. This is sad, but it makes you think. You really do have to enjoy what time you have today, because you can't take it back if your tomorrow never gets here. You used beautiful words and thoughts and I'm rambling incoherantly, but this was very pretty.
    | Posted on 2005-09-10 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this work. It's so hard hitting. I've read your work before, and I must say, this is my favorite. Very nice. The truth is hard to face, and knowing that loved ones can't be here forever is quite painful. I love the last stanza. Great work

    Never alone: Haley
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by HECATE_Sservant | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this hit home for me..i thought for so long that i was goin to have my bf with me but wen he did leave it killd me bcuz as u said ..i was alone and it took me a while to fine alone then then agen i still want him bak even if he doesnt feel the same ne more
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]


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