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    dots Submission Name: JUST ANOTHER DAY IN…….dots

    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 197
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       the tittle on this referes to a song just another day in allentown and that is were we lived when i wrote this we had a very old historic home with an old basement that was once a meat celler and the back was used for horses i loved it downt here it was all that was left when the city grew around it and became a slum of sorts anyway i am eager to know what you think

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    dotsJUST ANOTHER DAY IN…….dots

    Its quite here,aghh but its often quite for me.
    I am not afraid .
    I am accustomed to this whispering environment.
    The darkness on the other hand is mildly freighting .
    There is some light though breaking through the boards.
    Its casts a dusty hue , still its not enough for complete vision.
    My mind is alive deciphering the scents of this place .
    It is old here, a lost centuries wood sits rotting.
    Long gone horses mixes with mildew.
    There is a mystery here, lingering at the edge of the sunlight.
    I can vaguely make out the shadowy out line of a rusty meat hook .
    I could stay here all afternoon, let my cheek rest on its humble flooring.
    Alas , I collect myself for the return to the life of a madman.
    In the mayhem that is this city I stand alone among thousands.
    I wait on the second stair, half of me in and half out.
    The brightness is blinding makes me blink.
    I see the cars though ,enveloped in a hazy fog .
    I faintly hear the voices of two random females .
    They speak in a familiar ghetto tongue.

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      This poem sort of reminds me of the setting of a scary movie...lol. I like it because it is very descriptive. Now, did u mean quite or quiet in the first line?
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by Mahoganii | [ Reply to This ]
      i meant quiet meaning without sound guys sorry im a lil tired tonight funny how one listake can lose the whole feel of the line though huh thanks to mahogani for pointin that out
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]
      well i really like this one. captivates the reader to the end. you have a great talent for description. i felt as though i were there too.

    this is the line that really put me in there with you!

    My mind is alive deciphering the scents of this place .

    i could imagine the scents myself. greattttt poem.
    | Posted on 2005-08-17 00:00:00 | by MMISS | [ Reply to This ]

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