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    dots Submission Name: Poetic Minds...Part 3dots
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    Author: solemnpen
    ASL Info:    18
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 303/339/42
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       this is part 3 to a saga that is real close to heart, because it describes me so well.. a little shorter than the others, but it has the most meaning.. i hope yawll like it


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    dotsPoetic Minds...Part 3dots
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    The crowd is getting thin
    My emotions have chalked up another win
    The spotlights have been turned off
    Another verse is gone, another rhyme lost
    In the minds of those who screamed my name
    Of those who appreciate my game
    A poetic mind turned off for now
    People ask me, another chapter? How?
    Another wicked flow, "Oh my god, Wow"
    The sweat has now passed on
    But the rush will still live on
    Anxiously waiting for the next stage
    To be set up, so my pen can express its rage
    As i write this last page
    The music stops for now
    This is poetic minds...
    You have read the final phase




    Submitted on 2005-08-18 00:13:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I was wondering how you were gonna pull the third one off. But I think you handled it pretty well. And...that's..all I gots to say! You're good with that pen, you know? You better keep writing, or else..uhm..(insert some lame-ass threat here) but ya, anyways! Again, good job
    ~Kat
    | Posted on 2005-08-18 00:00:00 | by MorbidAngel114 | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice ending to the saga. You have really inspired me with these three pieces. I am actually going to a Slam tomorrow and this just gets me in the mood to go out and win it all. Nicely done...

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    | Posted on 2005-08-18 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]
      you are such an ispiration (how ever u spell that word)... but i love your poetry sooo much! it has allot of meaning put into word! .. the way you desrcibe yor self on stage...damn...if you ever publish your poetry i would love to buy your book! it is soo...i really cant think of another word..but your poetry is soo good

    kay
    | Posted on 2005-08-18 00:00:00 | by Kay | [ Reply to This ]
      This is good whether it is a part 3 or the only chapter, you are a poetic minded rapper,
    you expressed your glamour, you even caught the females attention like claudia-look how you grasp her. You are doing well. keep it up homie, holla boy, quit actin' like you don't know me!

    >>>brax
    | Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by Brack-Attax | [ Reply to This ]
      Anxiously waiting for the next stage
    To be set up, so my pen can express its rage
    As i write this last page
    The music stops for now
    This is poetic minds...
    You have read the final phase

    i'm kinda sad cuz this is it 4 poetic minds. but i know u'll keep bringing the reality made prose.u finished this nicely. it seems a lot calmer than the other 2. like u were running outta breath and u slowed down to finish the whole thing off.
    "troy"
    | Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]


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