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    dots Submission Name: Sexual Side Effects Part 1dots
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    Author: SouthrnQT
    ASL Info:    24/ Female/ Florida
    Elite Ratio:    4.51 - 290/271/31
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    Description:
       Have you ever had a dream that was so real, when you woke up, you swore it happened? Or better yet, have you ever had a dream....that you fulfilled? This is inspired by the man who's filling my mind, my heart, my soul. My only wish, my only prayer is that I wake up from this dream, only to find him there...fulfilling my every fantasy.


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    dotsSexual Side Effects Part 1dots
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    There between the sheets
    Like pages to a book
    My body writhing as my mind concocts desires
    unfortold

    A fantasy perhaps?
    The feeling...so real
    Still I swirl and glide with eyes tightly closed
    To what do I owe this pleasure?

    Succulant sighs of lust filled decadence
    Tasty bits of ecstasy unravelled within my mind
    The heat welling, boiling inside
    cries of need rip through the early morning birdsong......

    As his hand finds my skin
    fingertips pad across the forbidden
    Roaming free, they take hold
    Eyes.....fluttering open

    Visions in flesh as two bodies dance
    Between these sheets....
    opened by the pages in my mind

    Dream to Reality
    He takes me, there.....in the early morning hours
    His breath, fiery upon my breast
    Beastial growls ricochet throughout the room
    Saturating the silence

    There between the sheets.....




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      SHIT! You need your ass whipped for that one. Country girl, if your mother knew you wrote this she would chastise you and by you a car. I love this. This is hot. This is going down as a fave. You are one exciting writer. When I read this stanza big mama, the solar system begin to speak.

    Succulant sighs of lust filled decadence
    Tasty bits of ecstasy unravelled within my mind
    The heat welling, boiling inside
    cries of need rip through the early morning birdsong...

    I love it.
    | Posted on 2006-01-18 00:00:00 | by B-Gentle | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow.
    I think I need to go roll in the snow and cool down!
    This is an incredible piece, very sensual without crossing the line into sleaze and the imagery was perfect.
    I love those dreams that are so vivid, so real. Waking up sucks, but it was fun while it lasted! lol Great write,
    Traci :)
    | Posted on 2005-10-04 00:00:00 | by onetruesmartass | [ Reply to This ]
      This was really good! I hate it when that happens though...It's so god damn frustrating, you're having a really good dream and you think it's real and then you wake up and find out it isn't! it sux ass, man...k, anyway, great poem!

    -peace out
    | Posted on 2005-09-10 00:00:00 | by ilikescreaming | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nice indeed! I can totally relate to dreams being so real :) and to some coming true...your writing is very passionate and you have a beautiful mind...you also express your thoughts, dreams, fantasies and feelings very well...i look forward to reading more :)
    | Posted on 2005-09-09 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      Holy Hell How I'd love to be between those sheets!

    This is one of those poems that make you sit at your desk just a bit longer before actually getting up. It's not raunchy, and it's not pornographic, but it's sexual, and it's erotic. I love the way you write.

    Hey, is there any more room between those sheets for me?

    It was worth a shot.

    In awe- Grey
    | Posted on 2005-09-07 00:00:00 | by Greyson | [ Reply to This ]
      oooo...I liked the last two lines...goobada, goobada!

    Very sensual write here and...really...lets be honest...there wasnt any sheets involved, eh? Hee-hee. Well if they were, they were quickly one with the carpet, just like their clothing.

    Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      wow my dear! I love reading your writing so much! This write can make ones heart swell with unexpected desire and yet melt from the passion contained within. Kinda like the ebb and flow of the ocean ya know?
    Either way, I truly appreciate your work and I'm glad I stopped by to check this out! Thank you for sharing!
    Candi
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
      *clears throat* um, uh, yes...well (is it hot in here) *cue Nelly*...wow, very well written piece of hopeful desire. hm, i seem to be fumbling over my words right now. i usually don't do that, but it's not often that someone else's poetry gives me an emotional orgasm...so i'm kinda dizzy right now ;)
    so, yeah, beautiful words. heh, i hope i can have that effect on some girl some day...
    smitten ;)
    | Posted on 2005-08-18 00:00:00 | by treybur | [ Reply to This ]
      well girlfiend, you have got it going on...this poem is hot but ithink to have more of an effect you need to add more detail. Athough by the looks of it you have managed to get Smitten attension, but he is a man.
    I like the poem it is more romentic than sexual, i think thats good anyway. Keep up the writing and i will keep reading.

    Bailey19
    | Posted on 2005-08-18 00:00:00 | by Bailey19 | [ Reply to This ]
      That's a hell of a dream? I imagine this guy looks a lot like me! LOL I'll come fulfill ya dreams! Anyway, this was nice. Beautiful imagery. Nicely done!

    X
    | Posted on 2005-08-18 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]
      we share very simialr dreamscapes, and also have vewry similar writing styles. i loved this peice every passioanate word. the dream almost seems like a reality, i know these feelings of passionate despiration to hold on to the night, and to remain in your dreams, well written, ella
    | Posted on 2005-08-18 00:00:00 | by stormyskye | [ Reply to This ]
      Welp..dropped by to say hiya, I'm back...and lookie what work I find, smilez...I have come to expect from a talented writer such as yourself.

    Passion always starts within the mind, rippling outwards to your very skin, this work speaks of this and reminded me of this thought so well...opened by the pages in my mind...,
    Fullfilment being the ultimate pleasure.
    Super write!
    ~Alan
    | Posted on 2005-08-24 00:00:00 | by MidnghtScorpion | [ Reply to This ]


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