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    dots Submission Name: Please Go Awaydots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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    Description:
       I wrote this recently for a guy who I broke up with... I love him a lot. he's the one i was talking about when i kept writing all my broken heart poems. i love him so much. but i guess now i'll have to find someone new. and i've already got my eye on him!!! ha ha


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    Sitting here waiting,
    So I can see you.
    Always here wondering,
    Will I find someone new?

    Suspicions are rising.
    You tried cheating on me.
    Now please go away,
    And just let me be.

    I told you I loved you,
    But you wouldn't listen.
    It's not sparkles, but tears,
    That make my eyes glisten.

    You tricked me again.
    Now aren't you proud?
    You should shout how you fooled me,
    You should scream it out loud.

    It won't happen again,
    You've had your last chance.
    Now please go away,
    There'lll be no last glance.

    How could you do this?
    Why did you lie?
    Why didn't you tell?
    Why, now, must I cry?

    I love you so much,
    But you hurt me so bad.
    But now that it's over,
    I guess I'm kind of glad.

    So pleasse go away,
    I odn't want you here.
    There'll be no more crying.
    I've conquered my fear.




    Submitted on 2005-08-18 15:48:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I had something like that happen two years ago.Your writings I take it are of experience and things in your mind.I like it,ideas go with the organization without disturbing the emotion.Well keep it up.peace
    | Posted on 2006-02-02 00:00:00 | by nosferotu_gurl | [ Reply to This ]
      Excellent
    A testament to your fortitude

    You have had enough and you finally are able to move on in life


    Stay Positive
    And I hope you will be out soon

    Please remember
    Look at any negative you have to look deep and you have to look close but I guarantee you you will find a positive

    Take Care
    And
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-11-08 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh the pain of a lost love - I know it so well. Your rhyming was top rate and the whole thing flowed like a trickling stream (pure and steady). Take solice in the fact that although you still love him - HE IS NOT THE ONE. You will find him one day I am sure. Great write.
    | Posted on 2005-08-18 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      this one made me feel and i say thank you.
    this is my only reqierment and you did it nicely.
    you also protray a great sense of geeting over something and getting along with youre life.i guess im saying you protray a great sense of being down to earth in a lot of youre writings and thats very attractive,for lack of a better word. lol

    cool

    toyysruss
    | Posted on 2005-08-22 00:00:00 | by toyysruss | [ Reply to This ]


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