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    dots Submission Name: Delivered From Evildots
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    Author: Sarah Leger
    ASL Info:    15.f.kissimmee,Fl
    Elite Ratio:    3.74 - 436/387/80
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/
    Total Views: 962
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 894



    Description:
       I was bored 7th period is all.

    It's about a nightmare which paralyzes you but lets you live with it's memory until something takes that away..just for those of you [[Dev]] who don't get it.


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    dotsDelivered From Evildots
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    Cover your ears
    The lies long sought
    Breathe into the night
    When your fears haunt
    And you look for something to hold tight
    Moving not a muscle
    Make not a sound
    or it'll be over-

    it's over...

    Scream into eternity
    Your body now is bound
    A death is haunting
    Moving not a muscle
    So as to not make a sound
    You killed it now-

    it's over now...

    The lies long sought are found
    Bury you hollow
    In a grave too deep
    Bury you
    -just to be swallowed by sleep-
    Flee eternity
    That which wants to rise
    And I'll hide
    From the night
    Flowing through your veins
    And into the remains
    Of your torched heart
    Until we are delivered-

    delivered from evil...




    Submitted on 2005-08-18 15:48:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i really liked it. the flow was great and your words give the meaning more power. it gave a nice visual. and i like the theme good job
    | Posted on 2005-08-18 00:00:00 | by ira | [ Reply to This ]
      How come nightmares alway keep you in their grasp, but fun dreams...you always end up waking up right at the good part? It should be the other way around right? Well, I aint in charge of dreams and sleep...but if I was, I would change that policy and then...yeah...Carmen Electra would always have good dreams of me...hee-hee, and say "Rodman who?"

    I liked the concept of this write. Very unique and the way you laid it out was what made the reader relate to what you were explaining even better. Cool beans man. Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      i loved this poem it showed very graet detail about the fears of being alone in the dark with out saying your afraid of it. these kinda dark and erie poems i should think are my favorites and id hope your arent afraid of the dark or the things that go bump in the night.
    this was a great write and id hope to read another one soon.

    i used to have the same problem with the dark afraid of making noise one for the bad things to get me or two my step dad to wake up and be pist off for my fears.

    gerat write
    always and forever

    James
    | Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by Ace | [ Reply to This ]


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