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    dots Submission Name: Sensitive Thugdots
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    Author: Munchie_1226
    ASL Info:    25/F/E.STL
    Elite Ratio:    4.49 - 1831/1834/185
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 1739
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1064



    Description:
       Just a quick ramble. I felt like posting something.


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    dotsSensitive Thugdots
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    Where is the man,
    That will take me out?
    Show me a good time,
    And what loveís all about.

    One that will be sensitive,
    Yet still be a thug.
    Will love me unconditionally,
    Get me out of any hole Iíve dug.

    One with broad shoulders,
    Tall, with caramel skin.
    Full lips, a nice fade,
    And knows how to drink gin.

    Clean shoes, clean fits,
    Paying job, nice car.
    Whenever I need him,
    Heís not very far.

    No bitches, no numbers,
    No games, no lies.
    Everything he needs,
    Is in me and my thighs.

    Knows how to cook,
    Cleans up his own mess.
    Gives me everything I need,
    Except for the stress.

    Massages my feet,
    Brushes my hair.
    How he acts behind closed doors,
    His partners are unaware.

    For heís a sensitive thug,
    One who can hold his own.
    Whether at home or on the street,
    His loyalty is shown.




    Submitted on 2005-08-18 16:15:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "Sensitive thugs
    Y'all all need hugs"

    Jay-Z line. I likes. Nice one. Is this what the women are looking for? Intelligent thugs perhaps? I find quite amazing how a woman can describe what she wants in detail and most men just want the woman to have a pulse. Nicely done once again....

    X
    | Posted on 2005-08-18 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]
      Geez...where is that dude? He's missing out I tell ya! Obviously not in East Saint Looney! Does he have to know how to bake? Cuz baking and cooking are two separate animals. A sensa-sensa-sensa-sensative thug (scuse me had a case of the "Porky Pigs" there)...thats a nice way of putting it. Maybe hes a reformed pirate...that has managed to cross the high seas fully entact, with both eyes, arms and legs...hee-hee.

    I like it when you write...nothing but good stuff maynard. hmmm...lemme see if I can find something to critique...

    Full lips, a nice fade

    Did you mean to say face...or were you refering to the old saying..."Hate to see you go, but love watching you walk away." (Nice butt, ya know?)

    Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-08-18 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Sensitive Thug eh? Damn girl, if you find one like that send him my way! Either they are just plain thugs, or so sensitive its sickening. Alright, maybe not really the latter, never came across one like that. Nice poem, describes a great guy. Like I said, if you find a guy like that send him my way!
    ~Kat
    | Posted on 2005-08-18 00:00:00 | by MorbidAngel114 | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought this was a great emotional peice..you just let everything flow out instead of thinking too hard like many others that I've seen. I like poetry and im not that good at it myself..but you can always spot the level of creativity in a poem when the person didnt spend too much time dwelling on a single line.
    | Posted on 2005-08-18 00:00:00 | by norm | [ Reply to This ]
      hey, guess what? I got one of those! (but mines a saline cracker LOL) working on the nice car thing and such, but i got one... :P (nee-ner, nee-ner, nee-ner!) lol but i like this peice, it was a different way of saying where's Mr. Right and not Mr. Right-now.
    i like the wishful thinking that you incorporated into the peice w/o the lovelorn pathetic-ness, though. ya know? u didn't sound like a damsel in distress who can't tell from chicken and tuna...good job

    dylanpoe's girl
    | Posted on 2005-08-18 00:00:00 | by dylanpoe | [ Reply to This ]
      This was really cute and I agree with others who said that there was a lack of whineyness in this. Kinda straight up!

    I loved the line:

    Everything he needs,
    Is in me and my thighs.

    How true! How true!

    Nice write!

    Steve
    | Posted on 2005-08-18 00:00:00 | by SHRINKSDR | [ Reply to This ]
      sensitive thug??? hmm hadn't seen one in a while.. most thugs i know cant spell sensitive lol... but i know a few people including myself that fits this description.... but anyways...

    good write i loved the flow, it was almost a little diddy, quite nice for something put together so quick.. good job
    | Posted on 2005-08-18 00:00:00 | by solemnpen | [ Reply to This ]
      *looks down at X's comment*

    HUGS
    4
    THUGS

    lmfao!

    okay sorry lol

    How funny that on my way to work this morning I was just thinking about this...about the man I want...what he has to be...I wonder if I will ever find him...bu tin the words of Shrinksdr I just "keep on Keeping on"

    good post sis.
    | Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      A sensitive thug, I'm looking for one myself, their pretty hard to find. If you find one ask if he has a brother hahaha lol. I'm kidding, no seriously ask him.lol.
    | Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      I want the same thing. But you know what I find interesting? I know someone who practically fits that description perfectly (minus the car), and I've turned him down like four times. There must be something terribly wrong with me. Oh boyy. Anyways, I like this a lot. Great wording, and the flow is perfect. I really hope you find what you're looking for. Good luck with everything. You're definitely talented. Great job

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]


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