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    dots Submission Name: A Smiledots
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    Author: roxygirl239
    ASL Info:    14/f/VA
    Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 450/305/44
    Words: 51
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1270
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 425



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       God this sux. I'll most likely end up deleting this. oh well. But this just sounded cool in my head.


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    dotsA Smiledots
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    I ask
    "How can you smile
    When bombs are exploding,
    Your dreams shattered.
    Dominent fires are raging,
    Burning your thoughts,
    Nonetheless
    People.
    Your family has disappeared,
    They are among
    The ashes.
    And every one is your enemy?
    The gates of hell have been opened!"
    You say
    "My death
    Is approaching."




    Submitted on 2004-04-14 19:03:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      wow i really like the way you wrote this while yes there is a lot of bad things out there and you are right that our own death is approaching and that we have to live our lives like they are.
    | Posted on 2004-07-14 00:00:00 | by silentpoison | [ Reply to This ]
      I can picture that kind of smile, and the picture you put up with it is really cool and eerie, i liked it all.
    | Posted on 2004-04-14 00:00:00 | by joe quinn | [ Reply to This ]


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