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    dots Submission Name: Horizondots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 33
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 794
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Just a quick piece at work - I wish a pleasant day and weekend to all!

    Love,Peace,Joy!!! tif ; )


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    dotsHorizondots
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    When the sun
    sets
    Send with "IT"
    regrets

    For nothing hidden
    by the darkness
    will not the next day shine
    The wine of the morrow
    still grapes on
    the vine




    Submitted on 2005-08-19 16:10:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I wish you had made this longer. All you have done here is in effect - set the scene. When you have time, visit it again and finish it - the piece deserves it as the potential is vast.
    | Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with Frank. Ii would really be great if it was longer. I like how you began. Is like you set us up and then left us hanging...Or maybe this is the plan.
    | Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by Poetic Cure | [ Reply to This ]
      I have to disagree with the previous two. The length of a poem is irrelevant. I think length is a preference. This poetry that has painted a picture, eloquently. This poem has nothing more to say because it speaks volumes. It is deep.
    'For nothing hidden
    by the darkness
    will not the next day shine'
    This phrase it self could almost stand alone because of the power that lay within it.
    | Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by Tarwen Nevle | [ Reply to This ]
      Ahoy there matey :) excellent write here :P...It's kind of along the lines of when life gives you a lemon :P...but I enjoyed this here poem as always, nice write!

    Toodlez and stuff :)

    Stw
    | Posted on 2005-08-20 00:00:00 | by Stwcjj | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a beatiful picture you painted for the reader here.
    The sun set over the horizon on a nice summer night is one of the wonders of nature in my eyes.
    I want to see the sun set and rise over the ocean sometime in my life cause I bet tha is a sight ot behold.

    ~shawn
    | Posted on 2005-08-21 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]
      this was very subtle and vey picturous i could feel the warm sun and smell the wine
    thanx fo yor comment on wilderness i am glad you enjoyed the words dripping down the page is good
    thanx sandman
    hope all is well
    | Posted on 2005-08-22 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      Another short but sweet poem by you. This was vivd in details and the flow was great. I think that you did just fine, by making this short as to bring home the fact it is the end of the day. Great job.
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]


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