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    dots Submission Name: MALADYdots

    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       this sorta evolved from a dream i had it was vivid so i wrote it down later i turned it into what you see here

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    My secret sacred love
    Every night we are together walking
    Back in a place left long ago.
    When the afternoon wakes me you will be here still
    My misery isnít often seen.
    It hides in pools of black
    Peers up from its murky puddle.
    I am alone, but not really.
    A widower who still lingers in your light.

    Submitted on 2005-08-19 19:53:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow this poem has brought back lots of feelings. I once was a widow and experienced the same. Good write.
    God BLess Keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by Poetic Cure | [ Reply to This ]
      might need to be rewritten or elaborated on.
    all youre sentences are great.
    but you went from right to left field to me personally.was written as a first draft format maybe?

    all one mans opinion


    wes all toyysruss
    | Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by toyysruss | [ Reply to This ]

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