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    dots Submission Name: A WOMANS PLACEdots

    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       t his is just my thoughts alot of my female freinds tease me that i am so un liberated, but i think that woman have so many roles and thats great my role is that of a wife and mother wich is good for me i love that i live in a place were i have that choice

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    dotsA WOMANS PLACEdots

    In my world woman have a face
    We hold office
    We close deals
    We change the baby
    Make the meals
    I donít always get my way
    I get stuck home sometimes
    I make the bed everyday
    He works I donít
    I clean he wont
    I rub his back he kisses my head
    I rock the babe and put her in bed
    Closing the door I cant help but prey
    Thank you for my daughter
    With my mothers eyes of blue
    Thank god for my husband
    Thank god we live were we do

    Submitted on 2005-08-19 19:56:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i apperciate a lot of different wrinting.
    styles and all.and i apperciate this.
    first sentence caught my eye.which is always good for me.you seem to have a blessed perspective and a great situation for the most part.i enjoyed this very much.was very uplifting to me and kinda gave me a sense of meloncholy

    not that im from florida matters lol

    wes all toyysruss
    | Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by toyysruss | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting writing. It is nice to read that this author is satisfied to be where she is in her life and position as a mother and wife. You are one of the blessed ones who can have this.

    God bless and keep writing
    | Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by Poetic Cure | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this poem...it flowed very nicely...
    I liked th rhyme scheme...The thing I like about this poem is that it is expressing an origional opinion...you feel that women can do anything...but you would rather be a good wife and mother...thats awesome...I think it is wonderful that you have chosen to express your opinion on the matter with a poem...
    I again say that this is a wonderful poem...
    Very good job my friend...

    | Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by jessie thomas | [ Reply to This ]

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