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My Apologies


Author: Mia
ASL Info:    17/F/MD
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Apologies for...everything to my friends. I ussually post my good poems on xanga after they are reviewed...(( not that I am sure this one's any good )) but I don't know I might just keep this one on here for awhile


My Apologies



Here I am...late at night
Writing this, under a dim light
Thinking about my life, my past
Wondering how long all this will last

Well to you all, my friends
I wish to apologize before the night ends
For all that I've done that wasn't right
Everything that's caused sadness, anger, or fright

I'm sorry for being cruel, sometimes
Or for talking beind your bakcs
For when at the last moment, I change my mind
For any understanding that I lack

SOrry for not being strong
Sorry for often being wrong
I never meant to hurt anyone's feelings
Or to break you, right after healing

I'm sorry for crying when my tears don't matter
For not climbing all the way up the ladder
Sorry for my forgetfullness, and any biased fear
And for not calling you for a freaking year

Sorry I could never open up to you
Sorry I couldn't prove myself, to earn your trust
And for not cheering you up when you were blue
And also for my complaints, worries, and lust

Sorry for when I ignored an entire day
And sorry for not being able to go without you any longer
Sorry for the money I forgot to pay
And I apologize for not being stronger

This list could go on, but I'm growing tired
I'm sure the poems will go on
But for now, just go with this
These thoughts that my mind has aquired




Submitted on 2005-08-19 20:08:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  That was awsome. I have to apologize for the samethings sooner or later I vote for later.
Sorry for my forgetfullness, and any biased fear
And for not calling you for a freaking year
I thought that was funny. I could sssoooo relate to this poem the only thing I refuse to actually publicize (not sure if thats a real word or not) my apologies. Most of the time I dont apologize at all.lol.
| Posted on 2005-09-07 00:00:00 | by Drea | [ Reply to This ]
  hey...this was sad...sorry to say..but maybe you could be a better friend...like...maybe call your friends onvce in a while...and DO NOt talk behind there back...from expirience...its the worst...just try to be better...and if you cant find new friends who r the same as you...maybe then you will learn how it was and change...or ull get worse..who knows...

-Suicidalchild51-
| Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]
  you started great.it reminded me of a good song i once heard.ryme was well.i started loosing intrest when the phrase freaking year came out.it went from sophisticated to kinda childish.this is not a bad thing believe me,but it started a progression that felt to me it jumped track.
youre talent is apparent,also the fellings too.
the emotions or feelings prob contribute to the writing changing tracts for me but anyways

cool

all one persons opinion

wes all toyysruss
| Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by toyysruss | [ Reply to This ]
  this was a good way to say sorry. this was ok as a poem. the rhyming was kind of weird. you rhyme scheme seemed to change so i figured it was one that wasnt really going to have a rhyme scheme to me that usually throws off the flow of a poem or write sometimes but it didnt do too much to this. but it did seem kind of repetitve and i dont like that sometimes either but this was ok overall. once again a good way to say sorry though.

brenna
| Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by Day DreaMeR | [ Reply to This ]
  i liked this and waht is strange is as i glanced at it teh first time i didnt want to like it it seemed repeatitive i hate that but when i read it all the way through it just flowed it made since even though i didnt really like the sorrys at first i relize now the belonged there very good i cant comment anything more theen good really really good
| Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]
  hey this is a poem that is ok you shouldn't not like it because of the feelings that are in these words and you should be proud you have an expressive way to vent these feelings great young talent just look out for the rhyming rhythm and stick to it
check out my work
Thanx for the read
x
| Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by hammyj | [ Reply to This ]
  I thought it had a good flow. It was a interesting apoligetic poem. We all make mistakes we should be sorry for. But alot of people dont bother to apologize. I commend the author for doing this exact thing.
God Bless you and keep up the good writing...
| Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by Poetic Cure | [ Reply to This ]


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